Question

My Poetry Dump

Answer 1

Welcome to the land of Flockylattuel,
This is the land of the laughing gull.
Lily Littles will tell you the same,
And if you're lucky they will even tell you their name.
Fockylings roam the street,
Walking on their three back feet.
Tocfee in each one's hands,
The best drink in all the lands.
What is Tocfee you may ask?
Well, it's toffee like coffee you can carry in a flask.
Oooh, look at the shamera in action!
Now, this ladies and gentlemen is an interesting contraption.
This camera will take your picture and do a little dance,
On the streets and cities, they prance.
Now there goes the Ghlumbuil, our mascot in the flesh,
Oh no, Oh no Laughing Gull don't get caught in the mesh!
The Ghlumbuil ducks down quickly, gaining cheers,
And this is music to its ears.

Answer 2

Next few are sensory poems

Answer 3

☕Purple is a taste of grape jam with a late glass of tea☕
👑Purple is the feeling of royal silk on the bed of a queen👑
🍷Purple is the smell of a wine press on a busy day🍷
🌅Purple is the darker colours of a sunset🌅
🎻Purple is the sound of an elegant violin solo 🎻

Answer 4

The Big City🌇
🌃Buildings touching the sky🌃
🚗Exhaust pipes being overrun🚗
👄Car horns beeping and people talking👄
🍔Hotdogs from carts and everything bagels🍔
🚬Warm humid air and smoke from cars🚬
🌆The Big City🌆

Answer 5

The first one was extremely pleasant to read. The rhyming created a wealth of sentences that flowed well. You described these strange and new entities well. My only critique would be that there is a lack of imagery when it comes to the background. Especially when you’re introducing a ‘land’ of some sort that’s to be expected.

Besides that I think they were all well done, with the latter two being interesting to read, especially with those emoticons.

Answer 6

@Shadow Thank you! The first one was for a school project, which I did struggle a bit with because I suck at Dr.Suess writing style. The second two were just for fun and I posted them on social media so I thought, why not add emojis? I'm going to be adding more, I simply have to dig them up and type them

Answer 7

@justasoftie is going to be the next Poetry Slam Artist.

Answer 8

@Hero Thanks Hero! I've always been good at rhyming quickly and coming up with rhymes in a matter of seconds

Answer 9

Poetry Slam Artists are more personal, more passionate, and creative with their work. If you want to make it that far, you'll have to up your game. Nevertheless at least if you plan to take on the challenge, you have something to aim for. But nevertheless, whatever you do, make sure to make it your own. Figure out your own style. Uniqueness is the highest respectable attribute of a PSA.

Answer 10

A WIP: The World These Days

The schools, they wonder, why aren't the students happy?
It's because your good kids will make fun of anything, even if someone's hair is too shaggy.
You worry about them drawing ghosts and ghouls,
Or the rebellious ones who don't follow the rules.
How about we talk about the "Oh Lily, you can't like her, she's a girl,"
Oh God that statement makes me want to hurl.
You introduce a dogma that Hitler could have used,
You allow no outside ideas to be fused.


Continuing on our journey, you have the teens,
Oh yes, we could focus on many scenes.
Babies having babies,
The child's life being ruined because their young parents are too lazy.
"Oh I thought I was on the pill" , "Wait, Wait, it's that easy to get pregnant?",
I think the main problem now is the parent.
Why must you take birth control?
Be a teen, play the right role.
You aren't an adult, you aren't a mom,
Just sit there, do school and try to stay calm.

Why should I want to live right now?
How can we fix this mess? How?
This is today's generation,
Walking out of to school to make a better inspiration.
Stay in school, you cleary need to,
What I was trying to say is, that was rather dumb, how about you take a clue

Answer 11

Be a better inspiration***

Answer 12

You should post each poem as its own separate thread.

Answer 13

I just realized I probably should. But then I faced the problem of having so many I want to share, but them not being open

Answer 14

Also, I recommend that you post your poetry on the appropriate poetry sites so that you can receive more qualified critiques on your work.

Answer 15

Yeah, I just wanted to share some here. Let me know if you want me to delete any and I will

Answer 16

I'm actually working on compiling all of these to one book on a site, but for now if I come up with some I'll just put them in here

Answer 17

Why must I get so jealous?
Why must jealously compel us?
I hate when people talk to them,
I feel like they're my only little gem.
They made me feel special,
That's why I'm always extra careful.
I try their feelings like glass, and I'd do whatever they say,
Now, am I doing this the right way?

Why am I like this?
I snap at the littlest of things, like "Hey there miss,"
And there goes my bliss.
Is it something wrong with me?
Is there something I can't see?