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Answer 1

Triston Woodruff
English 4
Deborah McDermet
1 March 2019
My Motivation in SypherPK.
When people think about heroism or someone who never does anything wrong; a role model that they want to be like and copy if you will. People will often go back generation upon generation to the old time tales that are never really brought up nowadays. No one ever brings up people who exist even within the past entire generation. Do people just believe there is no one worthy of being looked up to? Why do they just say half heartedly that they look up their parents; and yes, some of them truly do respect and look up to their parents, but come on.
Most people tend to turn and look up to a fictional character that their favorite celebrity plays. For one good example, a lot of people look up to Superman because he’s made out to basically be the perfect man, so people end up feeling as if they are a hero, and then becomes the trend where everyone wants to be just like him. When in reality they are basically being asked to be dipped in radioactive waste, or be born on a different planet. They want to look at what is in front of them, instead of wanting to be Superman, why not try to be Christopher Reeve (Superman), or Brandon Routh (Superman Returns). People never look at who is behind the mask, (in this case the glasses). They would rather look up to someone artificial, who only helps people because he is told to and has to, they never look for the natural emotion, someone who is nice to you because they can be, someone who will take time out of their day to spend with you just because they can, not because they have to.
For a long time I have looked up to Ali Hassan, more widely known online under his alias, SypherPK. Yes, it seems a little childish if you will to look up to a Fortnite steamer, but that is not how I see it. SypherPK [age 22] takes hours out of his day doing random things online just trying to make the people in his chatroom happy. He could just ignore it and play the game as seriously as he wants to, but instead he goes and takes away from seriously playing the game to entertain the people in his chatroom.
Like some people do, I say this because nowadays it is incredibly often someone is just handed something (small loan of a million dollars). Ali began his YouTube channel back in 2011; however, he did not start full time uploading full time until mid 2012 when he began uploading RuneScape videos. Nowadays, roughly 8 years later and he has amassed over 1.547M subs on YouTube and collected over 2.077M followers on Twitch. Since his career on Twitch began in 2012 he has played over 35 games for a total of 6874 hours (a total of just under 287 days of gaming). While over half of that time has been put into a game that in the course of 5 months took the world by storm. In a matter of 5 months the hit game Fortnite had amassed 125 million players worldwide and in the course of 3 months over 2.7B hours were logged globally. This game is where Ali Hassen spends all of his time currently, he has become a professional player who has played across multiple PRO/AM tournaments. What makes me look up to Ali Hassen (SypherPK) is the fact that he obvious has a TON of skill, and what does he do with that skill, uses it for the enjoyment of other people; to me a even better example is that there are dozens of videos all across his channels and others that captured it off his stream of him taking anywhere between 20 minutes to several hours trying to help a 8-year old or a 11-year old get their first win on the game, just to make their day.
Ali Hassen first started realizing he loved gaming when he was eight years old when his dad bought him a PlayStation 2

Answer 2

How do I reword the first sentence

Answer 3

The way you phrased it was kind of weird. You can fix this by rewriting it to something like this:
`When people think about heroism, they think of someone who never does anything wrong, or a role model that they want to be like or imitate` or splitting it into two different sentences like this:
`When people think about heroism, they think of someone who never does anything wrong. A role model they aspire to be like or imitate`

Answer 4

Well one thing you can do is invert the sentence. You can also try to make the flow better, consider this:
"When people think about heroism or someone who never does anything wrong; a role model that they want to be like and copy if you will."

"When people think of heroism, they imagine a role model they want to be like and copy."

So you can remove part of the sentence or you could also split it into two:

"When people think of heroism, they imagine a role model they want to be like and copy. They may envision someone they know who always tries to do the right thing." (<-- this is more of an accurate representation of herosim vs "someone who never does anything wrong", just saying)

It's up to you, just remember to avoid "run-on" sentences. These sentences happen when you combine two full sentences improperly.

Anything else I can help with?