Question

While she slept the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.

According to The Elements of Style, what is the correct way to revise this sentence?

While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.
The alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear, while she slept.
The alarm kept ringing while she slept in Jamie's ear.
no change

Answer 1

Well, we know it's not the third choice.
`She slept in Jamie's ear`
The sentence does need change so it's not `no change`.
I don't think there should be a comma in the second option/

I believe the first option is correct.
`While she slept, the alarm kept ringing in Jamie's ear.`

Answer 2

thank you very much

Answer 3

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Answer 4

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