Question

Which sentence sounds better. The sentences are different variations that I made just want to know which is better
1. Banks are important to the U.S. economy because banks collect people's deposits in return banks give interest based on the amount of money deposited.
2. Banks are important to the U.S. economy because banks take money that people deposit and in return banks give interest based on the amount of money deposited.
3. Banks are important to the U.S. economy because banks collect money that people deposit and in return banks give interest based on the amount of money deposited.
4. Banks are important to the U.S. economy because banks take in money deposited by people and in return Banks give interest based on the amount of money deposited.

Answer 1

I see a few errors in the first 3 sentences
I can't really say which one is better until those errors were to be fixed e.e

Answer 2

Is that better

Answer 3

4
Seems the best but it needs a comma after "people"

Answer 4

ok thanks