The prologue of a book I'm trying to write and I desperately need advice on it:
“so you’re saying the famous Orion’s Star Hotel has a history of unsolved murder?” Jax asked while gazing up at the towering building.
“Yep, This is it,” Jess said.
The two people standing in front of the Roman pillars that held the building in awe. The miniature carvings on the walls indicated greek gods and goddesses in their glory. Some showed beasts in vivid detail, while others showed nymphs and sirens dancing and singing. The build of the hotel was a baroque style with color stained windows. The other person, Jess, gazed at the walls. The structures seemed dilapidated because of the weather and natural decay. The stones withered and worn told of stories and other tales unknown. Jess touched the cold stone of the pillar and shivered. She looked toward the person behind her and motioned them forward. The wind picked up quickly. The air grew cold. Jax pulled at Jess’s sleeve as she zoned out.
A sort of bar lounge filled her vision as she gazed in the distance. A young girl sat in one of the chairs in the corner. Her brown hair in a braid and a blue flannel tied around her waist. Her delicate features framed by the light of the fireplace nearby. She looked to be around 19 of age. Her head slowly raised and turned toward the woman with an awkward expression. Jess freaked out and the vision faded. Jax looked at her concerned.
“Another vision?” He asked
“Yeah. Another vision” Jess said while looking at her partner.
“What did you see?”
“Some… girl sitting in front of a fire in the lobby. I don’t know who she was though. She seems pretty young too.”
“Well, let me know if you see her again. Just don’t zone out on me like that again” Jax told her with a stern yet caring look on his face.
Jess looked at him with the sort of expression that said to shut up. As she walks towards the door, she looked at the arches and admired how they were constructed. Jax walked up next to her and opened the door. His pale green eyes shimmering her way. Her blue eyes flashed a red color while gazing into his green eyes.

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The prologue of a book I'm trying to write and I desperately need advice on it:
 “so you’re saying the famous Orion’s Star Hotel has a history of unsolved murder?” Jax asked while gazing up at the towering building.
“Yep, This is it,” Jess said. 
 The two people standing in front of the Roman pillars that held the building in awe. The miniature carvings on the walls indicated greek gods and goddesses in their glory. Some showed beasts in vivid detail, while others showed nymphs and sirens dancing and singing. The build of the hotel was a baroque style with color stained windows. The other person, Jess, gazed at the walls. The structures seemed dilapidated because of the weather and natural decay. The stones withered and worn told of stories and other tales unknown. Jess touched the cold stone of the pillar and shivered. She looked toward the person behind her and motioned them forward. The wind picked up quickly. The air grew cold. Jax pulled at Jess’s sleeve as she zoned out. 
A sort of bar lounge filled her vision as she gazed in the distance. A young girl sat in one of the chairs in the corner. Her brown hair in a braid and a blue flannel tied around her waist. Her delicate features framed by the light of the fireplace nearby. She looked to be around 19 of age. Her head slowly raised and turned toward the woman with an awkward expression. Jess freaked out and the vision faded. Jax looked at her concerned.
“Another vision?” He asked 
“Yeah. Another vision” Jess said while looking at her partner. 
“What did you see?”
“Some… girl sitting in front of a fire in the lobby. I don’t know who she was though. She seems pretty young too.” 
“Well, let me know if you see her again. Just don’t zone out on me like that again” Jax told her with a stern yet caring look on his face. 
Jess looked at him with the sort of expression that said to shut up. As she walks towards the door, she looked at the arches and admired how they were constructed. Jax walked up next to her and opened the door. His pale green eyes shimmering her way. Her blue eyes flashed a red color while gazing into his green eyes.

Padfoot06 · Answer

I think that the prologue is great the way it is. The imagery was amazing! I say nothing needs to be changed. I love it! :)