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Chapter One: Meet the family

Mailee's P. O. V.
~September 17, 2019~
I'm Mailee. I'm bisexual? At least, my BFF Hazzel thinks so. My boyfriend says otherwise, or he did before we broke up.
But let's back up too before all this.
~August 23, 2017~
I can't wait for school. New school, new friends, I've always been an outgoing person, although sometimes I wish I wasn't. After getting dressed, I bound down the stairs to eat breakfast; I can smell it. Smells like pancakes.
"Mailee, come get food!" My mom yells, then jumps when she turns and I'm already behind her.
I grabbed some pancakes and scarf them down, eager to get to the school "Slow down there, chipmunk. You'll give yourself a stomach ache." My mom chuckles before getting some for my little sister Maddie.
Maddie's in third grade, but she acts more mature than our brother sometimes. He's a year older than me and protective as hell.
He's also still in bed.
" since you're done eating will you, go wake up Zach and Mad's?" My mom looks at me and flutters her eyelashes. "Please?" We both laugh and I stand up.
" How can I say no. " I head back upstairs and into Maddie's room.
It's no surprise to me that she's already up and getting ready. " Hurry it up, Mad's, moms waiting. "
"I am, I am. " She smiles up at me. I pick up her dirty pj's off the floor and toss them into her hamper on my way out.
I walk down the hallway and walk into Zach's room without knocking. "Wakey, wakey, eggs and bacey. There's pancakes too. " He rolls over, groaning.
"I'm sleeping. " He buries his face into his pillows, falling asleep instantly. I roll my eyes.
"HOT GIRL 10 O'CLOCK! " I shout. He jumps up and runs to the window in just his boxer shorts. "Where?! " I bust out laughing and open his closet, throwing him a grey T-shirt. "Don't be late to school. " I go back down the stairs and look in the mirror.
I'm wearing black leggings that hug my new found curves and are ripped up and down the front of them. I also have on a light grey T-shirt on that's tight enough to show my figure but loose enough to be comfortable.
"You have another hour before you have to be at school! " Yells mom.
"Okay, I'll head out now and drop off Maddie at school. " I tell back. We shout I love you's and grab our stuff.
Once I've dropped off Mad's at school. I jog to Hazzel's house. We always walk together. Zach usually walks with us.
"Are you ready? Do you think there will be any hot guys? " She says and I shove her lightly.
"Maybe, but no seniors. We aren't freshman Peanut Butters.

Answer 1

I laugh. As we're walking Kleine high comes into view.
They rebuilt it a few years back so the building is fairly new.
Immediately I see Jordan Chamberlynn in the middle of a crowd of girls, the only boy with him is David Wyatt, Jordan's best friend and in Jordan's lap sits Zoe Crawley.
Now, Zoe Crowley is a freshman's Banana, she was known last year at Kleb middle in 7th grade for dating a junior in high school, then dumping him for Jordan, who is now a junior in high school. I met Jordan in 4th grade when he was in 6th and I've liked him since. I knew we would never happen because people like me and him don't ever get together since he isn't into girls like me, unpopular, imperfect and with moral standards. Girls who don't hand out their bodies like a library book, there to check out and use for a couple weeks, then return a little more damaged.
Hazzel and I walk to the entrance. " Did you see Zoe Crawley practically grinding on Jordan? " Says Hazzel, none to quietly. I make a face.
"Yeah let's not talk about my Bananaboy crush. " I say as Hazzel laughs knowing I like him still. Hazzel and I have been friends since I moved here in 3rd grade.
" I'm sorry, your right, I shouldn't tease. But can I say his hair gets darker every year. I swear I can't get my hair to stay dark for anything! " She says, tugging at her dirty blonde strands.
She’s right Jordan has nearly black hair that fades to a deep chocolate brown over summer.
He also has a square jaw line and freckles spattered on his tan skin, paired with gorgeous blue eyes. Jordan's tall somewhere around 6" 1' and well built.
Whereas I'm playing, I have long brown hair, blue eyes, tan skin-not as tan as Jordan's though-and average height, sitting at 5" 4'.
Hazzel on the other hand, is a goddess. She is slim and curvy at just 14 and has short dirty blonde hair with natural beach waves, brown eyes, and a small pump mouth she's an inch or two shorter than me, which always made her mad.
She snapped her fingers in my face, taking me out of my reverie. " What. " I ask, realizing that she was talking to me whilst we were roaming the halls to find where classes will be.
" Did you hear anything I just said?" I shake my head at her. " Never mind, I was only talking about that hot blonde over there. He's not your type, though not tall enough. " I roll my eyes, not even bothering to turn around and see what poor soul caught my best friends eyes as we make our way back outside.
Jordan's P. O. V
I laugh as David cracks a joke about Zoe and her ex.
"It's not funny, Jordan. " She stands up off my lap. " Wait, baby, come back. " I grab her arm gently and she lets me pull her in. She places a couple kisses on my knuckles and I kiss her straight on the mouth.
I look up as Mailee Williams and Hazzel Prows walk by. Mailee is a goody goody and has liked me since 6th grade to all my friends she's a geek, but between me and David, I think she's totally hot for keeping her virtues in today's society as a teenage girl.
Over the summer, she is completely blossomed. Mailee's got some curves going on and Bananas for that matter.
I realized I'm staring at Mailee at the same moment Zoe realizes it. "Look, it's Mailee Williams! The dork who has the hots for Jordan! " Zoe yells. Everyone is looking and Mailee has a look of horror on her face.
My friends begin to laugh and Hazzel begins yelling at Zoe. " Just because Mailee's hotter than your little Banananess- " Then she stops as Mailee runs into the school. Hazzel hesitates then runs after her.
I stand up and push Zoe off of my lap. " That wasn't cool Zoe. What did she do to you?! " I ask.
" She got too close to my territory. " Zoe smirks at me as she says this as is it's an obvious fact.
" I'm not your territory, Zoe. In fact, I broke up with you three months ago. Just because I dated you doesn't mean that I will always belong to you. " I say, clenching my jaw and running my fingers through my hair.
Zoe looks astonished that I would call her out like that then storms off in the other direction of where Mailee went.
That's relieving, one less thing to worry about.
"Your just gonna let her go? " David asks.
"Which one? " I shoot back.
He shrugs, " Both. "

Answer 2

~September 17, 2019~
I'm Mailee. I'm bisexual? At least, my BFF Hazzel thinks so. My boyfriend says otherwise, or he did before we broke up.

But let's back up too before all this.

backs up two entire years

Answer 3

shhhhhhhhh

Answer 4

jeez this is a long read, it looks... good? Not my genre of expertise nor do i have enough understanding of bisexuality or being female.

Answer 5

"school new school new friends" don't make any sense

Answer 6

I have no experience with being bisexual but my best friend is and I am female.

Answer 7

Put "can't wait for school. New school new friends"

Answer 8

mkay.

Answer 9

"I have always been an outgoing person, sometimes I wish I wasn't" doesn't sound right to me, maybe put a semicolon or an "although" before "sometimes". You don't have to but that is just my opinion and feel it needs it.

Answer 10

I'm sorry it's long, I know. I wrote this round august last year while I was at youthcare so it's a little a rough.

Answer 11

"After getting dressed, I bound down stairs to eat breakfast, I can smell it. Smells like pancakes." Put "the" before "stairs" and a semicolon or some other kind of separation before "I can smell it", a comma doesn't really work there I don't think

Answer 12

The fact that it's long isn't bad. I'm just very tired this evening lmao

Answer 13

Okay, I like that. I understand being tired to. bed late up early. earthquake.

Answer 14

" eager to get school" it's small and I'm sure you would have got it on your own but there should be a "the" before school

Answer 15

"I walk down the hallway and walk into", you don't need that second "walk". If I learned anything from gg is that repetition is something to avoid

Answer 16

Yeah, Theres a lot of problems like this... i've got to go eat so brb.

Answer 17

You go do that. I will say that it is a little too fast paced and not quite descriptive enough. I will not comment on the little grammar mistakes since I am sure you can fix those but I would slow down and describe some stuff.

Answer 18

Yeah, I was planning on doing that. I just was trying to get a skeleton for the chapter.