Question

"Heart of Mine" by Luke Carstater

Dad you always told me
If it ain't broke don't try to fix it
If she leaves, boy don't you dare chase it
But you never told me what to do if the broken hearts yours
Cuz now I'm leaning & crying against your front door
Wishing you were here, cuz I need a little more

I've got this beat up...
shattered..
Broken heart of mine
That keeps on...
Asking ..
Where she's at tonight
Yea that's damn right

Every time that I see you
You've got your arms around someone new
I can see it ain't working for you
What do you want me to do-o
Its time that I tell you the truth
Since its a little way past due
But yeah, my dad was right about you

Cuz Dad always told me
If it ain't broke don't try to fix it
If she leaves, don't you dare chase it
Cuz it ain't worth it anymore
But Dad what if that broken heart is yours
And I'm leaning, crying against your front door
Wishing you were here cuz I need you around just a little more.

Your daughter kept me hanging around
Broken-hearted and run down
I think its time she found out
Thought she had something she never found
I’m all washed up and buried in the ground
The kind of man I am now

So you lie to me
Lie to my friends,
I can’t take it and want this to end
I'm just doing whatever I can
even if it means feeling cold-hearted, but being a gentleman

Yeah but I still got this beat up
Shattered....
Broken heart of mine
That won't stop...
Asking ...
Will you girl be mine
Just for tonight...

Dad always told me
If it ain't broke don't try to fix it
if she's leaving you don't chase it
One thing you'll regret is all the opened cases
But don't worry son you'll make it
It'll take a lot of heartbreakings

Answer 1

Lol

Answer 2

what do y'all think about the part in "Quotation Marks"? keep it or replace it? please be honest.

Answer 3

idk

Answer 4

@huglover229 @Razor

Answer 5

What's up with the quotation marks.

Answer 6

I wanted feedback on tht part

Answer 7

It looks alright. Is there a pause after each word?

Answer 8

yes

Answer 9

If you edit it and put ... <- after the lines with a pause that'd make it look easier to read. Other than that I think it's okay!

Answer 10

Ok thanks man