Question

so, i wrote this in one of my moods and this how it turned out. its not finished yet but this is what i have so far. wrote this one my self. tell me what yall think.

Why Im I So Messed Up Inside

My brother's and sisters are all alive
None of them have done any drugs
Or at least they are hiding it well
Of course highschool is a fun point in life
They could've done it many times
None of them have threatened to take their lives
And I'm the baby so I'm spoiled right
When I was little I got tucked in at night
And Christmas was fun with lots of lights
Santa was real and I was nice
Where the f*ck have I gone in life
Maybe I was too happy and I needed to be cut off
Maybe I didn't deserve everything that I lost
Maybe I wasn't good enough at keeping my family happy and tied
Cause the knot that my parents had was lost in the strife

Why am I so messed up inside
Like someone reached in and tangled up my whole life
Everything I thought and felt has changed
And now my mindset is rearranged
Into this prison I can't escape
My minds beaten down and my hearts in a race
No one ever wins cause they both make me
Into this person I'm supposed to be
And the reason I never know how I really feel
Cause my mind is trying not to lose its will to live

My brothers and sisters are all alive
None of them have done any drugs
Or at least they are hiding it well
Of course highschool is a fun point in life
They could've done it many times
None of them have threatened to take their lives
And I'm the baby so I'm spoiled right
When I was little I got tucked in at night
And Christmas was fun with lots of lights
Santa was real and I was nice
Where the Pie have I gone in life
Maybe I was too happy and I needed to be cut off
Maybe I didn't deserve everything that I lost
Maybe I wasn't good enough at keeping my family happy and tied
Cause the knot that my parents had was lost in the strife

Why am I so messed up inside
Like someone reached in and tangled up my entire life
Everything I thought and felt has changed
And now my mindset is rearranged
Into this prison I can't escape
My minds beaten down and my hearts in a race
No one ever wins cause they both make me
Into this person I'm supposed to be
And the reason I never know how I really feel is
Cause my mind is trying not to lose its will to live
You see my heart goes beat beat beat
As I listen to this repeating beat
Of life always beating down on me
Trying to tell me who I'm supposed to be

Answer 1

@DCharger96 @angelina157 @MrMudd183 @Holly @CrazyHotGhost @countrygirl68

Answer 2

@Eddie97 wow..... it’s amazing.

Answer 3

i like it. though it may represent your personal thoughts and feelings, the words can probably relate to lots of people.

Answer 4

@unazaaaa thats kinda the point XD

Answer 5

this is really good

Answer 6

I’m sorry you feel this way^^

Answer 7

@Babyplier

Answer 8

Not bad man!!! And hey if you ever need me, I got your back!

Answer 9

@Eddie97 watch your language

Answer 10

Dude

Answer 11

It's a song man

Answer 12

..............*speechless*

Answer 13

The professional has no words

Answer 14

ALL HAIL EDDIE AS DA NEW PRIFESSIONAL

Answer 15

wow! cool! ur poem is cool it is like an author has written it

Answer 16

@itzmeekylie bruh, its not a poem.

Answer 17

such disrespect

Answer 18

Ik bruh it sucks man

Answer 19

@Eddie97 hehehe oops

Answer 20

@Eddie97 I thought that its a poem thats y I said.Anyways Im sorry for disrespecting ur song.

Answer 21

mission passed respect

Answer 22

this song is meant to be a deep thoughts rap

Answer 23

It’s really good

Answer 24

thx

Answer 25

No problem

Answer 26

damn this is really good and relatable, you can really feel the mood of the song