Question

Okay, so I wrote this a while ago. Haven't finished it yet. I don't know if I will make a full music vid with these lyrics but I might. tell me what yall think.

We were sitting in your backyard,
Just holding hands like most couples do.

Then you decided to ask me the one thing
the one thing that i had been dreading

You asked, if i wanted to break up, with you
I replied, no, all i want, is you.

But then, you stood up and walked away
and left me sitting all alone that day

Answer 1

mmmmm its OK

Answer 2

It’s a little bit short, but it’s good

Answer 3

A little depressing but its ok

Answer 4

@countrygirl68 He said he wasn't done so. I think it's alright

Answer 5

i would not listen to it keep up the good work😁

Answer 6

yeah, its depressing. but i made it when i wasn't in my best. so. yeah

Answer 7

Wow it is pretty good.... Before they ask the dreaded question you should put something else.... Just a tip

Answer 8

AMAZING GREAT JOB

Answer 9

I like it I think you did great most people can't really say how they are feeling but you did great. If that's what you mean but it I guess But the question is did she break up with you in real life or in a story?

Answer 10

just by reading it it seems to have a fast tempo but going off of the feeling you should be getting from it , it should start of slow and then get a bit faster as the song goes on and it should get more intense on the feeling.

i know you said you weren't finished but so far its pretty good, but you should try having some more words before what you already have here if you were to make a song out of this