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animekat23:

What would best improve Delilah’s narrative?

Hoodmemes:

Can u post Delilah's narrative?

Jeremana72:

yeah

animekat23:

My cat has been in my family for six years. We adopted her from the animal shelter when she was two years old and I was nine. Her name is Bettie. She is a very kind and loving cat. She always cheers me up when I feel sad. She has taught me a lot about kindness.

Jeremana72:

overuse of the word she

Jeremana72:

mybe replace some periods with commas

animekat23:

oh ok thanks

Jeremana72:

the sentances are way too short

Jeremana72:

thats y i say the commas

Hoodmemes:

Like the part where it says her name is betty

Hoodmemes:

there should be a coma

Hoodmemes:

. Her name is Bettie. She is a very kind and loving cat.)=this should be together and replace the period with a coma

animekat23:

tru😂

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