Question

here's a song i wrote awhile back. tell me what u think.
Dear Dad,
I'm only 16
but always had to act grown
was taking care of ur kids
like they were my own
Ain't had no help
had to do it alone
I was taking care of them and you
but nobody was looking out for me
I was balancing working and school
and stressing bout where we would sleep
we never had a place to call home
we was always out on the streets
i was only 15 stressing bout if we would eat
cuz all that money that came in your wallet
went back out into them streets
while we was worried bout keeping warm
u was chasing that next fix
But all you cared about was them drugs
even when the kids got taken
it wasnt enough to shake you!
man i wish you knew!
how much your babies cried for you!
we needed you!
It's been a year!
and you still aint noticed your babies are in the system
man all you care about is how much you can fit into that pipe stem!

Answer 1

aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Answer 2

it is a good song

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @06natrod52378
it is a good song
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An amazing song

Answer 4

Its a (Good) song.

Answer 5

why the parentthesis

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emphasize that its still a good song.

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i was scared to post it ngl

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thats exactly how i feel with my parents

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @demonwhitewolf
thats exactly how i feel with my parents
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cool

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all my dad does is do drugs and sell them then leaves us like which is more important drugs or ur kids

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @demonwhitewolf
all my dad does is do drugs and sell them then leaves us like which is more important drugs or ur kids
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cool

Answer 12

I was talking with @angelina157 in the dm's and she sent me this and we were just talking about it.

Answer 13

Can i offer advice on words used in your song (just stuff that seems as if it needs to be changed)?

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ofc

Answer 15

any constructive critisism is always welcome. just ignore spelling cuz i cant ever do that

Answer 16

lol its just one part " was taking care of them and you
but nobody was looking out for me" maybe changed to "I was taking care of them and you but who was taking care of me?"

I'm honestly starting to cry bc its so sad what is mentioned in this song.

Answer 17

awwe thats soo good!

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
lol its just one part " was taking care of them and you
but nobody was looking out for me" maybe changed to "I was taking care of them and you but who was taking care of me?"

I'm honestly starting to cry bc its so sad what is mentioned in this song.
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thanks. i felt like the only way to keep from bottling it up any longer was to get it out

Answer 19

how long did it take u to make up this song

Answer 20

make up? im sorry?

Answer 21

it's good

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like make the song

Answer 23

i wrote it awhile back but i think it only took like 2 days. and that was more because of work than actually sitting around doing it

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oh wow it honestly so good

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thanks

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np

Answer 27

it's a nice song, seems super deep.
it made me emotional so good job conveying feelings in this !

Answer 28

Like that song

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I mean its ight not tryna be a hater or anything buh its not all that yk.

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ngl its not bad but not catchy enough slick depressing a.s.f

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yh

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @G3tH3Pxmpthat5Amx5t
ngl its not bad but not catchy enough slick depressing a.s.f
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Dude It dont Gotta be catchy Its The meaning of the song that counts.

Answer 33

niceeeeeeee

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Skrt
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @G3tH3Pxmpthat5Amx5t
ngl its not bad but not catchy enough slick depressing a.s.f
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Dude the meaning of the song sucks.
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Y would u say that?

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-_-

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- .-

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Why You tryna Turn The tables on me Your not slick -.- Thats Not what I said.

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im sorry you feel that that my song sucks but honestly go somewhere else if thats all you have to say

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No THats Not what i was saying.

Answer 40

stop the cap.

Answer 41

Omg.

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Skrt
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @G3tH3Pxmpthat5Amx5t
ngl its not bad but not catchy enough slick depressing a.s.f
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Dude It dont Gotta be catchy Its The meaning of the song that counts.
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This is what I originally said.

Answer 43

i actually really loved it is had a meaning to it

Answer 44

Right same here

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u just edited it
lier

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Omg

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Scroll up u will see for your self.

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ok guys chill

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argue in dms. seriously.

Answer 50

Like bruh What exactly are you achieving Doing all this G3tH3Pxmpthat5Amx5t?

Answer 51

bruh what?

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-.-

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Skrt
Like bruh What exactly are you achieving Doing all this G3tH3Pxmpthat5Amx5t?
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just dont tag again off of my opinion

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I didnt Know You were my parent Omg! :o

Answer 55

stop. freaking. arguing. in. my comments.

Answer 56

pleas dont fight

Answer 57

I can relate to this song. I think its very good. I would say.. You should proabably change how u fit into that pipe stem. to something else

Answer 58

yeah I agree with @Astrid1

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordynwillman
yeah I agree with @Astrid1
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Yeah...

Answer 60

its good but shouldn't put it on here people be passing off as theres

Answer 61

true, ive already had 3 ppl come to me asking about my story then they tried to spin me a story using mine

Answer 62

yeah i bet

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @mary132
its good but shouldn't put it on here people be passing off as theres
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That is a smart idea.. You should probably... like...remove this from the site. Cuz people are gonna steal it up in a jiffy

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honestly im not too worried about it getting stolen, it was just a quick write, i just dont want nobody sitting around making up crap about there life based off my song. everyone be tryna say theyre life so hard like its a good thing. and its sickening

Answer 65

This is great!

Answer 66

it's all right ig

Answer 67

nice song it is awsome

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its as s

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jk

Answer 70

good song

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Loved the song!!!!! It is such a  sad and emotional song....... I love it and it's really crazy how I can connect to the song... I'm got adopted with my brothers and my dad didn't do that stuff but he left and the divorce happened when I was just 9 yrs old........ It was hard especially on my mom and my two biological brothers..... So in a way, I can understand where you're coming from in the song you wrote........ Just know, you're nothing like him. You are a strong, brave, resilient, smart young woman capable of doing anything you set your mind to. And you will do great things in life. I promise you that. You've got this!!!!!! <3

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @dgreer4
Loved the song!!!!! It is such a  sad and emotional song....... I love it and it's really crazy how I can connect to the song... I'm got adopted with my brothers and my dad didn't do that stuff but he left and the divorce happened when I was just 9 yrs old........ It was hard especially on my mom and my two biological brothers..... So in a way, I can understand where you're coming from in the song you wrote........ Just know, you're nothing like him. You are a strong, brave, resilient, smart young woman capable of doing anything you set your mind to. And you will do great things in life. I promise you that. You've got this!!!!!! <3
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agreed

Answer 73

I'm crying my eyes out rn. That is such a beautiful song. Thank you for sharing that with us. God bless u and ur dad

Answer 74

And I mean that ur dad finds god hon. And that is also loving that u could write that and share it

Answer 75

well if it makes you feel any better, my mother is in prison, she has been for about 9 years now, she abused me and molested me when I was a young child. We have to stick together, im here for you :)

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @DogGirl27
well if it makes you feel any better, my mother is in prison, she has been for about 9 years now, she abused me and molested me when I was a young child. We have to stick together, im here for you :)
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Same I was just not gonna share, but my mother slammed my head before I was a yr old through a china table, and abused me. We are all here for ya hon

Answer 77

Oh my gosh im so sorry

Answer 78

No don't be because that just made me stronger now. I was saved by my mama and dad, and now at the age of 17 im thankful that she done that to me. For now when I have kids i will not put them through that

Answer 79

Yeah thats how my dad tells me to look at it. Now I know how not to treat my kids when im older and it makes sense lol

Answer 80

yep all of us need to be there for one another.

Answer 81

Yeah, Well have a great day :)

Answer 82

U too

Answer 83

thanks :)

Answer 84

i love it

Answer 85

awwwwwwww amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 86

Yooooooooooooooooooooo

Answer 87

I really can feel the pain in this sing without somebody having to sing it

Answer 88

DAMMNNNN THAT'S AMAZING

Answer 89

it is really good!! i had that same problem aslo..but with my mom

Answer 90

Ur really good