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UPDATE TO THE UPDATE ADDED MORE: aight peeps yesterday wanted me to make more poems/raps so here is my first for today will make more later ig? comment if u want more.

I´d be lyin if i said i wasnt dying
Id be lying if told u lately i aint been flyn
Gimme syrup, medicine im cryn
Go to bed bruh
You need sleep from all your whining,
People telling me to quit
Sayn you need to let it go
But im no Elsa, feel like the puddle Olaf used to know
Need a doctor, stitches on my broken soul
Go to bed now another day will come and go
ANOTHER:
You shattered me
Broke me
Left me to waste
I thought you were the one I'm sick of your game
I just wanted you
but you ran away
i'm sorry to be quitting your race
It hurts to know it was all a lie
even in the end when you said goodbye
even in the end when you made cry
all i want to do is apologize
Why does this happen to me
I don't let people in cuz im scared to be
in a relationship that actually means
something to someone other than me
My heart i am sick of it
cut it out get rid of it
Im falling down done with this
Oh but your having fun with this
Get rid of me
shattered knees
get down and watch me bleed
as you shatter all my dreams
Just let me go let me be
the person that I want to be
the person you don't want to see
Im sorry for just being me
ANother:
You got me trippn
Got me missn
My head covered in clouds
But in reality,
Im falling down
If you really loved me
If you really cared
Youd be heartbroken if I said I didnt care
For some reason i'm caught up in yo trap
Dont know how to get out
You guilt trip me
You got me feeln bad
My brain is saying back away
My heart is saying no more pain
Should I listen to my deadbeat heart
Or listen to my body
It says oh plz no
Hes gonna hurt u
Hes gonna desert u
Hes gonna be the one who always concerns you
He needs somebody to lay on him at night
But I aint like that stuff
Ptsd thats right
Maniclly depressed
Still dealing with suicide
But I cant deal with that now cuz everyone else is in my mind
Hes out of it
But hes scared to go
Feels like if looses you he gonna lose it all
I really like him but he's not the one
Keeps being mean to my friends
That right there is a NO.
My family is different
They scream and fight
And i need someone to understand right?
But i dont think its this guy.
Guess what im trying to say,
Is im trying to go,
But im scared to back away
Cuz i dont like letting people go
Its my greatest fear in life
And im constantly obsessing
About people leaving me
Then being alone and confused and empty
I was abused as a kid
As you probably know
My sister hittn me telln me that no one loves me yo
My fondest memory of her is her saying shes sorry
But it never really happened
She doesnt have a clue
Im scared of abandonment cuz of people like you.
ANother:
I dont wanna be fake just wanna be real
But what does it mean to be the real deal
What does it mean to be able to feel
How does it feel to be able to heal
Look life!
Surrounding me
Pounding me
Hounding me
Drowning me
Imma person people dont see
Im stuck inside this tree
Black trunk and wilting leafs
I got all these nails in me
From flyers and missing things
From people who missing these
Lost since a rainy night playn hide and seek
Dont hide from me
Cuz i been in a kinda life that you dont even know
People talkin behind my back
People passn notes
People all they wanna do is ditch me let me go
And im just so blind i cant even see it yo
These people i think care about me for all these years
Will someday shrivel up, vanish, and disappear
Ya I cant even hear
All the lies they are telln me
The secrets that they're sharing when i told them to keep sumth'n

FOr Jenna: she looks at you, she sees your face, she thinks about the other day, the way you laugh, the way you sing, she thinks about the little things, she wonders if you really see, her when she laughs, and when she sings, she thinks about these little things, as you fall to sleep, if she had you one more day, everything would fade away, everything would be ok, but it wasnt meant to be, so she has to leave, so she cries, as she dies, the tears fall, from her eyes, she looks at you, her eyes a gleam, it wasnt meant to be, just you, and she, but it could never be.
For jenna´s sis:
You look at her, you look at me, I know you can see, I want you bad, to be with me, but so does she, I look at you, you look at me, I see your eyes, can tell your hiding, I´d hold you close, I´d keep you warm, leave her and just chose me, but when you look into my eyes, I know that we were all a lie, I know its time to say goodbye, to you, to me, and I cry, but you dont, and you lied, I still wont, why why, did you let me go, I thought that you loved me, but it wasnt meant to be

Answer 1

Nice...

Answer 2

Beautiful, This really captures emotion.

Answer 3

cOoL

Answer 4

Nice

Answer 5

Wow, it really good I bet it'll sound even better if you sang it -w-

Answer 6

I rap also

Answer 7

Next time, post in the correct section please. Anyway, this is nice. You're emotions do come through and it's evident there is pain. Nice job. Kinda short, and personally I like them longer so there is more of a story, but i love it. Great job luv (:

Answer 8

"I´d be lyin if i said i wasnt dying "

i almost died yesterday ?

Answer 9

All of your raps are so good, keep doing good! :)

Answer 10

good job!!!

Answer 11

cool I like it

Answer 12

This is awesome! Good job.

Answer 13

wow, thats amazing

Answer 14

dang your good

Answer 15

This is frucking amazing

Answer 16

:) cool

Answer 17

A Juice Wrld type of beat would go great with this song. Maybe the beat from, "Smile"

Answer 18

iss good homie.

Answer 19

Nice nice!

Answer 20

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
A Juice Wrld type of beat would go great with this song. Maybe the beat from, "Smile"
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naw he sucks

Answer 21

just like you

Answer 22

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
A Juice Wrld type of beat would go great with this song. Maybe the beat from, "Smile"
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naw he sucks
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Be prepared to get cyber bullied. Lots of people love Juice Wrld on here

Answer 23

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
A Juice Wrld type of beat would go great with this song. Maybe the beat from, "Smile"
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
naw he sucks
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Be prepared to get cyber bullied. Lots of people love Juice Wrld on here
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yea well i dont like you so...

Answer 24

heyo be nice to brayden

Answer 25

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BrokenMoon
heyo be nice to brayden
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naw my brother sucks

Answer 26

Seriously both of u just stop. idc if u hate brayden . hes awesome so go complain somewhere eelse about how much u love him. XD but seriousl, leave him alone he clearly isnt enjoying it

Answer 27

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BrokenMoon
Seriously both of u just stop. idc if u hate brayden . hes awesome so go complain somewhere eelse about how much u love him. XD but seriousl, leave him alone he clearly isnt enjoying it
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how you even know brayden?

Answer 28

he comments on my stuff, gives me tips,

Answer 29

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BrokenMoon
he comments on my stuff, gives me tips,
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so you dont know who he really is?

Answer 30

I said leave my post alonnnnnnnne wht do u not UNDERSTAND

Answer 31

Noice. <3

Answer 32

oh thass good

Answer 33

noice

Answer 34

Dang sis! Good job!

Answer 35

i loveit

Answer 36

It looks amazing KK UwU

Answer 37

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BrandonKeele
It looks amazing KK UwU
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awwww thnks bsf!

Answer 38

i like it 10/10

Answer 39

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @sxdsouls
"I´d be lyin if i said i wasnt dying "

i almost died yesterday ?
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yee yee but i be almst dying everyday o.0

Answer 40

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

Answer 41

I’m bored

Answer 42

Let her be

Answer 43

Ain’t nobody if it is someone else’s work

Answer 44

Everybody plagiarized

Answer 45

nice bruh

Answer 46

ight i fw it, it understanding how u feel

Answer 47

its amazingg, i can feel the pain as i read it and i understand it all

Answer 48

I like this, its really touching and mood changing in a way if you understand it, and I think you should write more of these your really talented and id like to read more of your work... <3

Answer 49

it's really nice.

Answer 50

it's pretty good

Answer 51

Nice

Answer 52

That is really good. Straight fire. My heart skipped a beat when I read the part that says, "just like the puddle, Olaf used to know." Lmao, that was really funny. Yes, I think that you should make more. You are obviously very talented. I'm looking forward to reading more from you. Thank you, for sharing this.

Answer 53

Oh wow bro nice job!

Answer 54

Your so good at making stuff like this! Keep up the good work.

Answer 55

damn

Answer 56

nicely done

Answer 57

when are you gonna write more O-o these are very good <3

Answer 58

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @mxddi3
when are you gonna write more O-o these are very good <3
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DO you WANT me to write more? I havent gotten a ton of medals on this one but i mean thats ok.... jusst wondering do you guys rlly like them this much??

Answer 59

YEESSSSSSSSSS! You go Gurl1

Answer 60

!

Answer 61

Nice!

Answer 62

gotta love depression hhaahahhahahahahhahahahaha