Question

I haven't wrote songs in awhile since my last heartbreak so I decided to try, You are welcome to criticize.

You hurt me
And you knew it
You had control over me and you blew it
I couldn't believe I cared
Yeah I bet your new gf is scared
I lost you years ago
And Yeah now you know
You don't mess my heart
Now I'm taken by the scars
Yeah I know you loved me once
Quit talkin' like you cared
Man, I shoulda known better
our love wasnt forever
And now im scared to be alone
Thats why all my friends are blowing up my phone
Im stuck on your page
Filled with rage
Because you found someone else...

Answer 1

Damn

Answer 2

don't make it so sad, bring some joy or something dang

Answer 3

Just damn

Answer 4

ASTRID DUDE THIS IS EPICCCCCCCC WAY BETTER THAN MINE! GJ!!

Answer 5

down bad I see.

Answer 6

Imma fall apart today

Answer 7

ill help i made more than 20 songs

Answer 8

imma be a rapper

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
don't make it so sad, bring some joy or something dang
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Its kinda my style of music, I am better at putting emotion into lyrics that to say it aloud.

Answer 10

ive made 20 songs

Answer 11

Between BrokenMoon and Astrid1 I'm just gonna fall apart

Answer 12

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @DanGonz
ive made 20 songs
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Ive made thousands XDDD

Answer 13

Astrid1 Amazing job!

Answer 14

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @XioGonz
Astrid1 Amazing job!
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Ty!

Answer 15

This Is Amazing

Answer 16

I like it, just the rhyme scheme doesn't really flow that well

Answer 17

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @xxDeppressionxx
This Is Amazing
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Ty

Answer 18

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @xxDeppressionxx
This Is Amazing
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Ty
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Np

Answer 19

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
I like it, just the rhyme scheme doesn't really flow that well
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Yeah I realized that XD I literally just starting writing down emotions and then mixed them into a song. I have lots that are skilled with rhymes but i dare not to share those.

Answer 20

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid2
Between BrokenMoon and Astrid1 I'm just gonna fall apart
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awwwww

Answer 21

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BraydenLove
I like it, just the rhyme scheme doesn't really flow that well
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Yeah I realized that XD I literally just starting writing down emotions and then mixed them into a song. I have lots that are skilled with rhymes but i dare not to share those.
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Yeah like I said I thought it was good, just it sounded a little choppy. All love

Answer 22

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
don't make it so sad, bring some joy or something dang
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Its kinda my style of music, I am better at putting emotion into lyrics that to say it aloud.
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i can see where that comes from but you also have to look out for what youre saying into your lyrics. they can bring other people to feel "related" when they never were. its your music style, i understand, but just dont make it towards the point where you feel "like you cant do things anymore" most people feel this way due to the music they listen to. so thats just something to look out for.

Answer 23

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
don't make it so sad, bring some joy or something dang
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Its kinda my style of music, I am better at putting emotion into lyrics that to say it aloud.
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i can see where that comes from but you also have to look out for what youre saying into your lyrics. they can bring other people to feel "related" when they never were. its your music style, i understand, but just dont make it towards the point where you feel "like you cant do things anymore" most people feel this way due to the music they listen to. so thats just something to look out for.
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Yeah, Ive written a few happy songs but they arent so good XD, but yea i see where you are going.