Question

is my book good? plz tell me what you really think.

Chapter 1
The beginning
This is a story about two kids that were meant to meet. They will do great things together. Now I know what you are thinking, you are thinking this is some sappy love story. Well… yes and no. it depends on what you call love. I say every story and every book is about love. I was asked once what is love. That is the question you should be asking yourself. What is love? What does love mean to you or maybe you want to know what I think love is. You will find out the answer throughout this story.
Now let’s go to the beginning. This story starts out with a fourteen-year-old girl named Mia. She is just a normal kid, if you can call any one normal. You could call her normal in her own way.
“hi dad!”
“hi honey, how was your day?” this is my dad Mike. He is pretty cool for a dad.
Today was my last day of school. I am so glad it is over, I could not wait for this day.
“it was fine. How was yours?”
“mine was same as always.” that my dads’ way of saying it could not get any better.
My dad is a Preacher. He never complains about his job. Growing up I never understood that so one day I asked him why. He said “because when you are working with God that is when you are having the most fun you will ever have. When I am up on that stage there are no worries. He is there with me I know this because every day I go up there and I know exactly what I am going to say.” My dad loves teaching me about God.
“I am going to go up to my room ok dad?”
“yeah that’s fine.”
Yesterday my favorite band/youtubers had an entering for a contest. They would not normally do this but today was there last day of college together and this is there way of celebrating. The entering for the contest was simple, all you had to do was like the video and commit “done” when you were done liking it. When you did that it entered your name into the contest. The winner of the contest would get to fly out to meet the band/youtubers. Everything would be payed for by this band. The band is my favorite band ever. They call themselves make mistakes. When you fly out to meet them you get to give them ideas on what they should do in their upcoming videos. Now I am going to see who won.
I walked into my room and went to my new slightly used computer. My dad got it for me when my mom passed away. I opened it up and waited for it to power up. That part took a bit. When it finally powered up I logged in and went to my email.

Answer 1

THAT IS SO AMAZING!!!!!!!!! I HOPE U DO VERY WELL WITH UR STORY

Answer 2

very good kee up the good work

Answer 3

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @n32carrillo
THAT IS SO AMAZING!!!!!!!!! I HOPE U DO VERY WELL WITH UR STORY
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ty! loll i cant believe you replied. your answer is prob bias anyway loll

Answer 4

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @CocoCammron
very good kee up the good work
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ty!

Answer 5

it's actually good😃

Answer 6

im not reading all of that

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Laylalyssa
it's actually good😃
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well ty!

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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loll

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Laylalyssa
it's actually good😃
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well ty!
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np

Answer 10

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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loll
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i would love to tell if it is but im more of a math person

Answer 11

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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loll
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i would love to tell if it is but im more of a math person
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me too!

Answer 12

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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loll
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i would love to tell if it is but im more of a math person
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me too!
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ok u like math and ur pfp is a pit so now ur my friend

Answer 13

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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loll
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i would love to tell if it is but im more of a math person
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me too!
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ok u like math and ur pfp is a pit so now ur my friend
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lollll ok

Answer 14

o uh im more of a er romance kinda person but its really good

Answer 15

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @n32carrillo
THAT IS SO AMAZING!!!!!!!!! I HOPE U DO VERY WELL WITH UR STORY
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ty! loll i cant believe you replied. your answer is prob bias anyway loll
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its not bias. its so good

Answer 16

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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Wow, really?

Answer 17

i like it. would love to read more of ur stories.

Answer 18

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @kayleeelizabeth0419
o uh im more of a er romance kinda person but its really good
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me too. whats your fav rom com?

Answer 19

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @kayleeelizabeth0419
o uh im more of a er romance kinda person but its really good
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me too. whats your fav rom com?
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tbh i like them all

Answer 20

It's really good! Where did you find the inspiration to make it?

Answer 21

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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Wow, really?
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yes really, have fun with ur life

Answer 22

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @kayleeelizabeth0419
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @kayleeelizabeth0419
o uh im more of a er romance kinda person but its really good
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me too. whats your fav rom com?
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tbh i like them all
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oh ight, i like twilight personally and the hunger games.

Answer 23

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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Wow, really?
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yes really, have fun with ur life
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Trust me, I will.

Answer 24

Its amazing.

Answer 25

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @fern
im not reading all of that
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Wow, really?
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yes really, have fun with ur life
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Trust me, I will.
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thats good

Answer 26

Its amazing.

Answer 27

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @n32carrillo
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @n32carrillo
THAT IS SO AMAZING!!!!!!!!! I HOPE U DO VERY WELL WITH UR STORY
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ty! loll i cant believe you replied. your answer is prob bias anyway loll
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its not bias. its so good
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loll ok

Answer 28

Mind if I put it in a document to read later? e.e'

Answer 29

Its a nice book,hope it becomes published one day if so i'd for sure read it

Answer 30

are you all even reading it or commenting to raise ur SS, U hoodmemes for example just came on the post, how u read the whole thing so fast?

Answer 31

@Hoodmemes

Answer 32

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
It's really good! Where did you find the inspiration to make it?
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well that is a funny story. the book is abt a dream i had one night

Answer 33

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @MxxnLight
Its amazing.
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ty!

Answer 34

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Joe2019
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
It's really good! Where did you find the inspiration to make it?
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well that is a funny story. the book is abt a dream i had one night
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Cool! I hope you write more of it!

Answer 35

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @MxxnLight
Mind if I put it in a document to read later? e.e'
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you can if you want, you just better not steal my book lolll

Answer 36

Its long an I am not going to read it but im shore its amazing

Answer 37

It´s really good:)

Answer 38

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @hhanan
It´s really good:)
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ikr :)

Answer 39

Noice book o;

Answer 40

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @darkknight
are you all even reading it or commenting to raise ur SS, U hoodmemes for example just came on the post, how u read the whole thing so fast?
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I actually was on this post before and rad it,had to go do something and left the post....u cant just assume things darkkight.


And i actually commented to express how i felt about their book-like dude..

Answer 41

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
Its a nice book,hope it becomes published one day if so i'd for sure read it
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ty so do i!

Answer 42

Who else likes to read?

Answer 43

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @AsherValeros
Who else likes to read?
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i like math more, but reading is ok

Answer 44

Hmm, while I do think it is entertaining, and the ending rlly had me waiting to see what happened, there are a few things that I personally would work on. The story moves kind of quickly and without many transitions. So I'd say maybe when you're done writing the whole thing, that is something you can work on. Also, more details could be added. As I said, the story moves a little fast so if you slowed down the pace and took time to really explain the situations, it'd be a little better. But, I don't wanna sit here and edit this for you, so I'm gonna leave it at that. Good job though. It's interesting and maybe you could put a part 2 to this bc i'd love to see what happens next (:

Answer 45

I like it

Answer 46

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @mxddi3
Hmm, while I do think it is entertaining, and the ending rlly had me waiting to see what happened, there are a few things that I personally would work on. The story moves kind of quickly and without many transitions. So I'd say maybe when you're done writing the whole thing, that is something you can work on. Also, more details could be added. As I said, the story moves a little fast so if you slowed down the pace and took time to really explain the situations, it'd be a little better. But, I don't wanna sit here and edit this for you, so I'm gonna leave it at that. Good job though. It's interesting and maybe you could put a part 2 to this bc i'd love to see what happens next (:
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ok ty so much! this is really helpful! i will see what i can do abt the pace.