2nd part of the book, let me know what you think.

When it finally powered up I logged in and went to my email. Siting in my inbox was a new email from Ali (Ali is my best friend). It said:
what’s up?! Today is Saturday. Do you know to me Saturdays are good and bad days? I know if you were here you would ask me why are Saturdays good and bad days? Then I would just tell you why but you are not here right now so you have not asked me yet. Well what have you been up too?
I miss you,
Love Ali
I replied back to her saying:
I know, I like talking to you face to face much better than having to email you. Haha you know me so well! Why don’t you tell me why Saturdays are good and bad days? It has only been one day since I saw you, so not much.
I miss you too,
Love Mia
I exited out of my email and went to Instagram. The band said that they would post a picture telling everyone who won the contest. OH, MY DEVIEL!!!
“what’s wrong?!”
“nothing everything is great! I have to tell you about something.” I told my dad about the contest.
“What?!”
“yeah I know isn’t it great?! I got to go call Ali!”
“I didn’t tell you that you could go. Shouldn’t we talk about this before you do anything? it’s not that great.” He mumbled that last part so I decided to ignore it. This is where my dad is not so cool but I already had a plan so it did not matter.
“ok, then let’s talk about it, and you know it’s not a boy band there are girls in it too.” That is when I set the plan in motion and I could tell that me telling him that there were girls in the band softened him up.
“oh, ok well there is no way in heck that you are going alone.” Since me and my dad are Christians, he does not cuss even though I tell him that just replacing the bad word is the same as saying the bad word.
“ok well in the post they said I could bring someone, so I thought I could ask Ali and her mom to come with me.”
“oh… ok well she has to be on board with it you know?”
“that is why I am going to call them.” My dad likes to be stubborn when it comes to stuff like this. He has no good augment but he still does not want me to go.

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2nd part of the book, let me know what you think.

When it finally powered up I logged in and went to my email. Siting in my inbox was a new email from Ali (Ali is my best friend). It said:      
what’s up?! Today is Saturday. Do you know to me Saturdays are good and bad days? I know if you were here you would ask me why are Saturdays good and bad days? Then I would just tell you why but you are not here right now so you have not asked me yet. Well what have you been up too? 
I miss you,
	Love Ali
I replied back to her saying: 
I know, I like talking to you face to face much better than having to email you. Haha you know me so well! Why don’t you tell me why Saturdays are good and bad days? It has only been one day since I saw you, so not much.
I miss you too,
	Love Mia 
I exited out of my email and went to Instagram. The band said that they would post a picture telling everyone who won the contest. OH, MY DEVIEL!!! 
“what’s wrong?!”
“nothing everything is great! I have to tell you about something.” I told my dad about the contest. 
“What?!”
“yeah I know isn’t it great?! I got to go call Ali!” 
“I didn’t tell you that you could go. Shouldn’t we talk about this before you do anything? it’s not that great.” He mumbled that last part so I decided to ignore it. This is where my dad is not so cool but I already had a plan so it did not matter. 
“ok, then let’s talk about it, and you know it’s not a boy band there are girls in it too.” That is when I set the plan in motion and I could tell that me telling him that there were girls in the band softened him up.
“oh, ok well there is no way in heck that you are going alone.” Since me and my dad are Christians, he does not cuss even though I tell him that just replacing the bad word is the same as saying the bad word. 
“ok well in the post they said I could bring someone, so I thought I could ask Ali and her mom to come with me.” 
“oh… ok well she has to be on board with it you know?” 
“that is why I am going to call them.” My dad likes to be stubborn when it comes to stuff like this. He has no good augment but he still does not want me to go.

Joe2019 · Answer

@Hoodmemes

lilaspie7 · Answer

cool

Hoodmemes · Answer

This is Great ,idk how ppl have the imaginations to make books but I think its super cool and creative

Joe2019 · Answer

$\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}$ @Hoodmemes
This is Great ,idk how ppl have the imaginations to make books but I think its super cool and creative
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ty! the book is from a dream i had

Hoodmemes · Answer

I see your making ur dream into a reality thats amazing bro

Joe2019 · Answer

ty so much!

kaleighh533 · Answer

this is rlly good great job

Joe2019 · Answer

$\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}$ @kaleighh533
this is rlly good great job
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ty!

kaleighh533 · Answer

$\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}$ @Joe2019
$\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}$ @kaleighh533
this is rlly good great job
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ty!
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yh np anytime

mxddi3 · Answer

This is nice!! I still stand by my comments I made on your previous post and I know you messaged me and asked for help, so i'm not gonna get into it too much here, but sometimes it does get a bit confusing. For example, the girl was checking the band's post, but you didn't really say that she had won. I have an idea for this section (I will  probably mention it when we go over your writing) that could help improve it. Hopefully you don't take this too hard because i'm not trying to tear apart your story. Overall, very nice story. Can't wait for the rest !!

Joe2019 · Answer

$\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}$ @mxddi3
This is nice!! I still stand by my comments I made on your previous post and I know you messaged me and asked for help, so i'm not gonna get into it too much here, but sometimes it does get a bit confusing. For example, the girl was checking the band's post, but you didn't really say that she had won. I have an idea for this section (I will  probably mention it when we go over your writing) that could help improve it. Hopefully you don't take this too hard because i'm not trying to tear apart your story. Overall, very nice story. Can't wait for the rest !!
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no this is exactly what i want/need. TY!

theycallmelesbian · Answer

ahhhh i love reading and this is amazing