Question

Im writing a review on Minecraft for my English assignment. Anything I can do to edit and make it much nicer to read?

Answer 1

you play that game

Answer 2

minecraft

Answer 3

yes

Answer 4

Um tbh I think it is fine as is.

Answer 5

@mxddi3

Answer 6

Maybe, talk about when it was created, Who created it, and why they created it.

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
Maybe, talk about when it was created, Who created it, and why they created it.
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ok

Answer 8

imagine

Answer 9

oh wow bro keep it up man write more if u can

Answer 10

Great Job Bro

Answer 11

Also, Maybe add an introduction and a conclusion.

Answer 12

Make sure you Have a summary of what your writing bud

Answer 13

i'd switch the first and second paragraph. You should introduce the game before you talk about the characters you can be, etc. Also, maybe in your last paragraph, i'd say to change your wording. Maybe try something like "Minecraft has proven to an amazing game, however a tip for improvement is they could add an option for music on the mobile version." Idk just something like that to make it seem more proper. Uhm, for your last sentence, maybe try saying that you rate it a 5/5, but restate a couple reasons why. This could be bc it allows for creative ideas of players as you've mentioned before. Then instead of "i would totally give this a try", maybe try something like "I would definitely recommend this game to others" Idk, just my opinion. Good luck !!!