Question

a song that i wrote
smiling grenade

Exchanging glances and taking risks. then say you'll share with me one love. the way you make me smile makes me go crazy. sometimes makes me want to cry.

chorus
You call me ugly you're ugly too. to guard you and to guide you. I think a relationship will last a long time. the skies above are blue.

Verse 2
what I love about you is your sweet and nice. but they won't be saying That you actually love me. I can't go back to where I used to be.

chorus
You call me ugly you're ugly too. to guard you and to guide you. I think a relationship will last a long time. Eyes on the moon of blindness.

Answer 1

"You call me ugly you're ugly too." that was the best part.

Answer 2

umm

Answer 3

what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything

Answer 4

umm

Answer 5

wym

Answer 6

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
"You call me ugly you're ugly too." that was the best part.
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lmao yes

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
what do u think now

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
what do u think now
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
It still sounds pretty bad

Answer 10

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
what do u think now
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
It still sounds pretty bad
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
u also gotta think it is my first song that i wrote

Answer 11

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
what do u think now
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
It still sounds pretty bad
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
But maybe um try making a different type of song?

Answer 12

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Hoodmemes
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @doglover12
what do u guys think give me tips and if u think i need to change anything
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
At first thought the song sounds bad not tryna be mean about it though
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
what do u think now
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
It still sounds pretty bad
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
But maybe um try making a different type of song?
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
like i said it is my first song

Answer 13

practice makes perfect lol, keep it up.

Answer 14

it might be a good poem

Answer 15

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @KjSaif
practice makes perfect lol, keep it up.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
ty

Answer 16

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @sak123
it might be a good poem
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ty

Answer 17

it would be a great poem

Answer 18

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @sak123
it would be a great poem
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ty

Answer 19

@doglover12 you're welcome