Question

Ok so I’m writing a new song I haven’t finished yet but I jus wanna know if it’s going good or not

There’s too many broken hearts, I don’t where to start
They broke it all the time, and we never forgot
They keep saying they love you, but they lie and get caught
Love is nothing but pain, they take ur heart and it rots
I was broken down in pieces, I stood up and I fought
We say we love them all the time, but that’s just something we thought
My pain is not gone, but my love it took off
I tried loving someone, and they just broke my heart

Let me tell you sum, love is nothing like it seems
Real love is nothin, it’s just a part of our past and our dreams
There’s love and there’s pain, it’s like we’re playing on teams
Your heart is like a blanket, it rips and breaks the seams
People say we cant feel pain, because we’re all just teens
But it’s nothin bout that, that’s not what it means
Pain is now our life, it’s like a part of our genes
Love runs like water, it’s like flowing down streams
My heart is on fire, it’s boils up and it steams

I just wanna know, why they break our hearts
It’s always the one we love first, thats just how it starts
I want this pain to go away, I wish there was a restart
We love and we love, but the pain it never stops
We try to show love, but feel pain nonstop

Answer 1

nice

Answer 2

Could use a lil work but keep on trying and you will get somewhere some day.

Answer 3

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @xxDeppressionxx
Could use a lil work but keep on trying and you will get somewhere some day.
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I am I jus started it

Answer 4

Nice work