Question

~Poem I wrote~ Honest Feedback plz and ty <3
What's in my head?
This noise that is deafening
But yet makes no sound at all
Why does it yearn for me to die?

What is this feeling?
That rakes at my skin
And makes my heart feel desolate
That holds the blade to my vein?

All these people around me
And i feel so alone
Stuck in a miserable home
And i feel so alone
No one to turn to for the pain
Because i'm alone

What is that feeling?
That sense that makes everything right?
Where is that person?
That fills the void in my chest
That breaks the silence in my head
That heals the cuts on my skin
Will my wish ever come true?

When will I stop feeling so depressed?
When I'm on the floor?
Bled like some pig?
No one to witness my death
Because i'm alone

Answer 1

smh

Answer 2

i love it

Answer 3

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BunnySenpai
i love it
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Aww tyyyy <3

Answer 4

Thats good

Answer 5

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @bryna321
Thats good
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tyyyy <3

Answer 6

Nice!

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @bryna321
Thats good
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tyyyy <3
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Yw

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
Nice!
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Tyyy Astrid <3

Answer 9

wow! this is really good, you should keep doing this.

Answer 10

Totally

Answer 11

Salt, this is beautiful. Sounds very much like you. I like it.

Answer 12

Shhh

Answer 13

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @mxddi3
Salt, this is beautiful. Sounds very much like you. I like it.
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yeah Maddie, shush >.>

Answer 14

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @totallyjaydenn
wow! this is really good, you should keep doing this.
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Tyyyyy I try <3

Answer 15

It's cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooolioo

Answer 16

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @XioGonz
It's cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooolioo
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Tyyy <3

Answer 17

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @totallyjaydenn
wow! this is really good, you should keep doing this.
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Tyyyyy I try <3
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Keep doing it! no matter what

Answer 18

I totally will jayden

Answer 19

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @SaltTheLoser
I totally will jayden
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Stop taking the credit, smh.

Answer 20

Lmao

Answer 21

wow that is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work Jordan! If you keep writing and sharing these, I would love to here more from you!

Answer 22

We all know you aint talented enough lol

Answer 23

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
wow that is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work Jordan! If you keep writing and sharing these, I would love to here more from you!
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Tyysmmmmm I really enjoy writing <3

Answer 24

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @SaltTheLoser
We all know you aint talented enough lol
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I'm srry ur not on my level yet <3

Answer 25

breh uh huh

Answer 26

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @SaltTheLoser
breh uh huh
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yes

Answer 27

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
wow that is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work Jordan! If you keep writing and sharing these, I would love to here more from you!
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Tyysmmmmm I really enjoy writing <3
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I love writing but I dont love doing poems but Im glad that you do i would keep wring

Answer 28

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
wow that is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work Jordan! If you keep writing and sharing these, I would love to here more from you!
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Tyysmmmmm I really enjoy writing <3
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I love writing but I dont love doing poems but Im glad that you do i would keep wring
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Tysmmm <3

Answer 29

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @jordan30
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
wow that is absolutely amazing, keep up the good work Jordan! If you keep writing and sharing these, I would love to here more from you!
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Tyysmmmmm I really enjoy writing <3
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I love writing but I dont love doing poems but Im glad that you do i would keep wring
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Tysmmm <3
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Your so welcome

Answer 30

this is amazing, the way it's worded, thats what makes this one of the best poems on here, cause the way its worded is so spectacular, this is a verryyyy great poem