Question

So, I wrote this a while ago, but I thought maybe I should share it. This is a poem that I made.


My mind is racing. I'm going crazy. I think I'm in Too Deep, but nobody can save me. Life is like a roller coaster. It goes up. And it goes down. But lately mine keeps going round and round. Hand and hand, time's making plans. Going by too fast, I might not even get a chance. To say the words, I need you to hear. I miss the way you'd just appear. In the dark you stand alone. Ashes to ashes, Stone to Stone. You might come close, but you'll never break my bones. The turns you take will be your mission. To relieve your sins, and let yourself break in. Take my hand and you will see, this is the person you were made to be. Hand and hand, we're moving backwards. The time it will take, to forget the worst. Open your heart and you will believe, you are perfect, no matter what they see. This chance you take might set you free. To say the words I need you to hear. My missions over, it's time for me to disappear.

Answer 1

ok this is so freaking good! FIRE! How long did it take you? I think you perfectly displayed your emotions nice job

Answer 2

good job

Answer 3

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @BrokenMoon
ok this is so freaking good! FIRE! How long did it take you? I think you perfectly displayed your emotions nice job
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Thank You. It took me about 3 days to write.

Answer 4

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Ashley29
good job
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Thank You

Answer 5

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Ashley29
good job
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Thank You
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yw <3333

Answer 6

Nice

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @LeBeanMan
Nice
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thx

Answer 8

i love it, it's great :) <3

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @CuteTeddyUwU
i love it, it's great :) <3
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thank you. <3

Answer 10

I felt this. Good job

Answer 11

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @XioGonz
I felt this. Good job
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Thank you

Answer 12

that is really good u should make it into a song and call it "too deep" sorry I'm a songwriter and I know another songwriter when I see one

Answer 13

Very creative but why so sad 🤝

Answer 14

Great job.
i like it.

Answer 15

Great job on it

Answer 16

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @eliza
that is really good u should make it into a song and call it "too deep" sorry I'm a songwriter and I know another songwriter when I see one
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Thank You. I just so happen to be a songwriter. I have more poems. And I have some songs as well. Maybe I can share them, with you. And post them on here.

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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @eliza
that is really good u should make it into a song and call it "too deep" sorry I'm a songwriter and I know another songwriter when I see one
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Thank You. I just so happen to be a songwriter. I have more poems. And I have some songs as well. Maybe I can share them, with you. And post them on here.
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that would be nice

Answer 18

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
Very creative but why so sad 🤝
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Thank you. And yes, most of the things I write are sad.

Answer 19

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @06natrod52378
Great job.
i like it.
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Thank you!

Answer 20

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @josh1911
Great job on it
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Thank you. <3

Answer 21

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
Very creative but why so sad 🤝
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Thank you. And yes, most of the things I write are sad.
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Oh, well if you're feeling that in real life, I hope things get better for you and please don't with that for yourself. You are a well decent human being 👍

Answer 22

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
Very creative but why so sad 🤝
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Thank you. And yes, most of the things I write are sad.
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Oh, well if you're feeling that in real life, I hope things get better for you, and please don't wish that for yourself. You are a well decent human being 👍
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thank you, I appreciate this. I think you are a human being.