Question

Hello, People, I wrote a poem, it's called
"Puppet Master". I hope you all like it. If you have any suggestions, put them in the replies section, below. Tell me what you guys think.


I feel like a puppet. Some greater power is controlling be ever second I get. When I try to breathe, I am told not to. I'm just supposed to listen to everything she says. Even if it hurts me or someone else. She forces me to pretend to be someone else, to hid myself. She pulls the strings and I am to do what she says. Every day it gets harder for she doesn't control who I am. For she did not create me. For she did not create me. What will they want me to say or do for that matter. I am stuck in internal darkness. Internal nothingness. Internet control. What should I do, where should I go. How does she expect me to live if I can't even breathe? I can't breathe. It's like I'm stuck in a bubble. Why can't I move? Unless she pulls the strings. Unless you pull the strings. I can not continue to live this unbearable life, does defecate sound in my ears, this horrific tears the continuously roll down my face, these words smells, this endless dark hole I've tried many many times how to cut the strings movies free, but it's an endless unless thick strings. every time I tried to cut them to grow stronger and stronger by the minute oh, by the day, by the year oh, by the century. Why. Why. Why can't I escape oh, why can't I escape. Why do you trap me? Why do you trap me? why won't you let me breathe, why won't you let me breathe? Why? Why? Why? These questions roll over and over in my head oh, as I get further and further from the living each day. What do you want for me oh, what do you want me to do what do you want me to say, what just answer me already. The only way to escape is to let go, and forget everything I've ever known and everything I've ever loved everyone oh, everything. Let it all go to waste as I fade oh, as I fade into the dark oh, as I fade away never to be seen again by anyone, especially she that has a hole in my soul.

Answer 1

cool.

Answer 2

Sorry, I just realized I spelled a couple of things wrong.

Answer 3

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Laylalyssa
cool.
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thank you

Answer 4

nice but you should put this in writing

Answer 5

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @nini01
nice but you should put this in writing
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yes, ik. I meant to put it in wring, but it didn't show me the topic box.

Answer 6

oh ii but its still good

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @nini01
oh ii but its still good
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thank you

Answer 8

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Laylalyssa
cool.
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thank you
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yw

Answer 9

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @nini01
oh ii but its still good
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thank you
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yw

Answer 10

nIcE

Answer 11

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Kenthedoll
nIcE
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thx

Answer 12

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Sam63354
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Kenthedoll
nIcE
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thx
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no problem

Answer 13

great job

Answer 14

Good job

Answer 15

Wow, this is amazing and hella deep, thee wording and imagery is amazing

Answer 16

I really like this. I feel like I can really understand what's happening while reading it and you can tell that there is some real emotion into it.

Answer 17

really amazing