Question

Hii yall so i wrote a song and would love feed back, its not polished yet but if u have any lyrics to add or replace I would love the feed back Thx:)

Verse1:
Everytime I try to do the write thing it always feel like know ones even listening.
People say that I just need to let it go, but its harder than you think when its all new, you know

Pre-chorus:
But I just gotta keep my head up, I'll get thru it one way or another (whoa) , and its okay to fall apart just don't let it get to your head, and i want you to know, i want you to know

Chrous:
Its gonna be alright-, its gonna be alright-

Verse2:
When I come home from a big day I wanna tell you everything but you walk away, and its not fair that I listen to you and pay attention to you

Pre-chorus:
But I want you to know, (run) I want you to know
Chorus:
It's gonna be alright-, its gonna be alright
(Possible Bridge) (Dont have one quite yet):
When something dont o your way, You'll survive,
You'll be okay, You'll live to see another day,
When your feeling alone, and you just want someone to hold you in there arms, keep you safe and warm, remeber your not alone
Back to chorus

Answer 1

hey now, from what i'm reading, it sounds great.
but if it were a song that i wrote, i'd personally add some words that possibly rhyme just to get a rhythm, you know? but overall, like i said, its great

Answer 2

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @ellapayne
hey now, from what i'm reading, it sounds great.
but if it were a song that i wrote, i'd personally add some words that possibly rhyme just to get a rhythm, you know? but overall, like i said, its great
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Yea I was thinking the same thing, I have some lines in there ryme but like i said its not polished def needs some work but thank you for your feedback :)

Answer 3

yes ofc, it looks like you took a lot of time on it, good job

Answer 4

yea LOl tank you
:)