Question

Im writing an essay and need help editing and proof reading altho im still working on it any one who can help?

Answer 1

I can help.

Answer 2

oooo thank u im having issues im worried im going off on something else in the essay

Answer 3

Yea ofc, are you using google docs?

Answer 4

yea

Answer 5

Do you mind if you share the doc with me? Itll be easier to edit

Answer 6

nah its fine i just need to find out how

Answer 7

make a copy and then on the top right corner it says Share"

Answer 8

urs looks a lil diff

Answer 9

idk if i can :<

Answer 10

Does that help?

Answer 11

not rlly..

Answer 12

lol okay ill just edit here!

Answer 13

Send a screenshot of how your docs looks like.

Answer 14

Ohhhhhh you're in Windows Documents.

Answer 15

;-; im hella dumb oml

Answer 16

lmao you're not she was just talking about Google Docs

Answer 17

Just send a screenshot of your essay, copy and paste, or something so we can see it.

Answer 18

:< shes not just we were not on the same page

Answer 19

Ohh yea lol, I dont use windows docs but ill be glad to still edit :)

Answer 20

If you truly love something why not strive to prove that it’s not a hobby. All Lilly’s life she had the uncontrollable love for the sky. She loved how vast and open it is and there seemed to be no end. On the days the sky was most clear she would lay under the sun for hours, but not only did she love the morning sun and sky but she also loved the night sky. The beautiful diamond like stars against the dark blueish black sky. Thankfully she lived in a low population town so the stars were more visible than any other town. For Lilly the night sky gave her the same feeling as a mother hugging her children to comfort them. How could one not love day and night, a perfect cycle around, and around, like two deer chasing after each other. The night was when the world was put to rest, time for it to heal, time for troubles to die down, and the world become...still... Thinking to herself she always wondered if there was a world out there.. a world where life can be restarted, and a chance to make a place with less pain.

When she would look at the night sky she could swear she could see something that looked like a fantasy world. So, she got her telescope one night and looking threw it, the world she saw had land as vast as the sky, with grass greener then anywhere on earth to compare it too. And off to the side was something that looked like ruins of an old castle. Vines were growing up the sides and parts of the building were crumbled. That’s it! That’s where she was going to go, but how?

There are many things Lilly doesn’t know about herself. Things not even her parents knew. Day after day she tried to tell everyone about what she saw in the night sky. Everyone but her knew that there was no ability anywhere in the galaxy for there to be life. She even tried to show her parent s threw her telescope, but they couldn’t see anything, only her. Was she seeing things? For hours each night she would go outside and look for the fantasy world she saw and every time she did she found it, and fell in love with it over again. The fact she was the only one who could see it made her start to ask questions. Why could only she see it? Is there anything else she can only see?

Answer 21

i want to try something, what's your email?

Answer 22

If you truly love something why not strive to prove that it’s not a hobby. All of Lilly’s life she had an uncontrollable love for the sky. She loved how vast and open it is and there seemed to be no end. On the days the sky was most clear she would lay under the sun for hours, but not only did she love the morning sun and sky but she also loved the night sky. The beautiful diamond-like stars against the dark blueish black sky. Thankfully she lived in a low population town so the stars were more visible than any other town. For Lilly, the night sky gave her the same feeling as a mother hugging her children to comfort them. How could one not love day and night, a perfect cycle around, and around, like two deer chasing after each other? The night was when the world was put to rest, time for it to heal, time for troubles to die down, and the world becomes...still... Thinking to herself she always wondered if there was a world out there.. a world where life can be restarted, and a chance to make a place with less pain. When she would look at the night sky she could swear she could see something that looked like a fantasy world. So, she got her telescope one night and looking threw it, the world she saw had landed as vast as the sky, with grass greener than anywhere on earth to compare it too. And off to the side was something that looked like the ruins of an old castle. Vines were growing up the sides and parts of the building were crumbling. That’s it! That’s where she was going to go, but how? There are many things Lilly doesn’t know about herself. Things not even her parents knew. Day after day she tried to tell everyone about what she saw in the night sky. Everyone but she knew that there was no ability anywhere in the galaxy for there to be life. She even tried to show her parent s threw her telescope, but they couldn’t see anything, only her. Was she seeing things? For hours each night she would go outside and look for the fantasy world she saw and every time she did she found it and fell in love with it over again. The fact she was the only one who could see it made her start to ask questions. Why could only she see it? Is there anything else she can only see?

Answer 23

I did some corrections, if you can, get Grammarly, its better for you to check your writing and stuff.

Answer 24

This is how it says your essay looks like

Answer 25

oo thank u so much!!

Answer 26

No problem!

Answer 27

If you truly love something why not strive to prove that it’s not a hobby. All Lilly’s life she had an uncontrollable love for the Sky. She loved how vast and open it is and there seemed to be no end. On the days the sky was most clear she would lay under the sun for hours, but not only did she love the morning sun and sky but she also loved the night sky. The beautiful diamond like stars against the dark blueish black sky. Thankfully she lived in a low population town so the stars were more visible than any other town. For Lilly, the night sky gave her the same feeling as a mother hugging her children to comfort them. How could one not love day and night, a perfect cycle around, and around, like two deer chasing after each other. The night was when the world was put to rest, time for it to heal, time for troubles to die down, and the world became...still... Thinking to herself she always wondered if there was a world out there.. a world where life can be restarted, and a chance to make a place with less pain.

When she would look at the night sky she could swear she could see something that looked like a fantasy world. So, she got her telescope one night and looking at it, the world she saw had land as vast as the sky, with grass greener than anywhere on earth to compare it too. And off to the side was something that looked like ruins of an old castle. Vines were growing up the sides and parts of the building were crumbled. That’s it! That’s where she was going to go, but how?

There are many things Lilly doesn’t know about herself. Things not even her parents knew. Day after day she tried to tell everyone about what she saw in the night sky. Everyone but her knew that there was no ability anywhere in the galaxy for there to be life. She even tried to show her parent s threw her telescope, but they couldn’t see anything, only her. Was she seeing things? For hours each night she would go outside and look for the fantasy world she saw and every time she did she found it, and fell in love with it over again. The fact she was the only one who could see it made her start to ask questions. Why could only she see it? Is there anything else she can only see?

Answer 28

I made some changes, good luck! :)

Answer 29

i recommend taking it to Shadow? he can help you edit

Answer 30

whos dat

Answer 31

@Shadow

Answer 32

In the very first paragraph, who is Lilly? Is she from something you've read or is she someone you've created?

Answer 33

Im a she...

Answer 34

Another thing, between the second and third paragraphs, you just jumped from one thought to the next. She's wondering how she's going to get there, and now there are many things she doesn't know about herself. Maybe adding something in between would help it flow better.