Question

i need feedback on this story i wrote because it's due today

Answer 1

Noice

Answer 2

its good

Answer 3

damm that is a really good story

Answer 4

Inchresstinggg me gustaa

Answer 5

It's good, but in the first paragraph I see no punctuation-

Answer 6

its good i like it

Answer 7

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @supie
It's good, but in the first paragraph I see no punctuation-
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I was just about to say that lol

Answer 8

lol

Answer 9

THERE IS NOT A SINGLE PERIOD IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH
i-

Answer 10

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @supie
It's good, but in the first paragraph I see no punctuation-
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\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @snowflake0531
THERE IS NOT A SINGLE PERIOD IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH
i-
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Answer 11

oh sorry, i didn't read the comments lol

Answer 12

lol ok

Answer 13

just a quick thing my friend helped me with is and her name was on it when it was printed
@babygirlimarie

Answer 14

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @snowflake0531
THERE IS NOT A SINGLE PERIOD IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH
i-
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I didnt really look at that one but yeah...

Answer 15

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @b1az3
just a quick thing my friend helped me with is and her name was on it when it was printed
@babygirlimarie
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thank you thank you

Answer 16

it's good

Answer 17

thank you

Answer 18

@ babygirlimarie go in it i did add a new character

Answer 19

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @b1az3
@ babygirlimarie go in it i did add a new character
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Yeah I saw the son

Answer 20

From what I can see, it is best if you add punctuation into the correct spots in thee 1st paragraph. And maybe if you were to add some dialogue into the book that may add more of an interest into it.

Answer 21

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
From what I can see, it is best if you add punctuation into the correct spots in thee 1st paragraph. And maybe if you were to add some dialogue into the book that may add more of an interest into it.
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thats a good idea, ill talk to him about that and we will work on it

Answer 22

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
From what I can see, it is best if you add punctuation into the correct spots in thee 1st paragraph. And maybe if you were to add some dialogue into the book that may add more of an interest into it.
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thats a good idea, ill talk to him about that and we will work on it
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Alright, if you need any further opinions ( if you make a new post w/ the new edits) give me an @ c:

Answer 23

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
From what I can see, it is best if you add punctuation into the correct spots in thee 1st paragraph. And maybe if you were to add some dialogue into the book that may add more of an interest into it.
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thats a good idea, ill talk to him about that and we will work on it
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ok

Answer 24

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @babygirlimarie
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Astrid1
From what I can see, it is best if you add punctuation into the correct spots in thee 1st paragraph. And maybe if you were to add some dialogue into the book that may add more of an interest into it.
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
thats a good idea, ill talk to him about that and we will work on it
\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{End of Quote}}\)
Alright, if you need any further opinions ( if you make a new post w/ the new edits) give me an @ c:
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ight I will

Answer 25

@Astrid1
@babygirlimarie
i'm here dm me

Answer 26

Did you proofread this?

Answer 27

I advise you to look over it again if you have.

Answer 28

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @Floo
I advise you to look over it again if you have.
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yes i use grammerly

Answer 29

just add punctuation imo

Answer 30

\(\color{#0cbb34}{\text{Originally Posted by}}\) @sxdsouls
just add punctuation imo
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For sure I am going to go work on it right now and read over it

Answer 31

Good job!!

Answer 32

thanks, guys