What do ya think?

1917, Flanders Field, Belgium. lance corporal Wiliam Smith.
“The Lieutenant of the sector said that there will be a charge today over the line. I’ve heard stories about German machine guns and how they can rip through a charge just like that. It scares me to think millions have already died. The best thing about this is that the Americans join in April. How the men and I long to be back at home.”
Rifle fire rings out across the land the alien look of it would scare anyone to it thinking it was. Artillery was leaving craters; 4 million shells were fired in one offense in Flanders.

Whitles rang out from every sector around the trenches. Men ran across land, thousands of them. The Corporal Was in an advanced position in no man's land. Artillery and whizz bangs ran out. He was in dought out, Most of it was water 1-2 feet deep. Only about 4 feet of air left inside. Shell on shell hammered the roof but never broke through. The rain came down in waterfalls into bunkers and officer quarters. With water came floods.
The flooding, the rushing of the water the sounds it made when the debris.

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What do ya think?

1917, Flanders Field, Belgium. lance corporal Wiliam Smith.   
“The Lieutenant of the sector said that there will be a charge today over the line. I’ve heard stories about German machine guns and how they can rip through a charge just like that. It scares me to think millions have already died. The best thing about this is that the Americans join in April. How the men and I long to be back at home.”  
Rifle fire rings out across the land the alien look of it would scare anyone to it thinking it was. Artillery was leaving craters; 4 million shells were fired in one offense in Flanders.

Whitles rang out from every sector around the trenches. Men ran across land, thousands of them. The Corporal Was in an advanced position in no man's land. Artillery and whizz bangs ran out. He was in dought out, Most of it was water 1-2 feet deep. Only about 4 feet of air left inside. Shell on shell hammered the roof but never broke through. The rain came down in waterfalls into bunkers and officer quarters. With water came floods.
The flooding, the rushing of the water the sounds it made when the debris.

Astro · Answer

What is this?

RomMosher · Answer

Ww1 story based off of the Flanders offensive

Astro · Answer

Wow, This is actually amazing

RomMosher · Answer

I've been listing to this thing called "The Pitty of War" on Spotify it has letters from the soldiers on both fronts.

Slumpedk · Answer

Amazing story my boi

Astro · Answer

That's cool. I suggest maybe trying to think of a different perspective in your story

RomMosher · Answer

I haven't worked on it for a while tho

RomMosher · Answer

I'll change his name maybe to be nicer and more different

Astro · Answer

Cool