Question

tell me what you think please. i'm trying to write something.

as i look to the skys,
all i can think of are your eyes
you are honest and never tell me lies
with you, everyday is a surprise
i hope we never say our goodbyes
you are more beautiful than a sunrise,
don't let anyone tell you otherwise.
i love you more than you realize,
leaving you would lead to my demise
if only you knew, you are my paradise.

Answer 1

Its really good, Just think not every single line has to rhyme

Answer 2

but other then that its great

Answer 3

I think you did really good, most people can't even make an entire poem flow smooth like that keeping every line rhyming and alike. Good job!

Answer 4

thx

Answer 5

Your welcome :)