So.. I decided to right a story, be honest and tell me what you think.

“What is happening down there?” I thought, as I picked up a sock on my bedroom floor. All morning I had been hearing my mother and father’s voice yelling and arguing at each other. “ You know what, I can’t handle it anymore,” I said. Then I threw the rotten apple core on my bed and raced down the stairs. “Stop it!” I yelled to my parents. “ I can’t handle this anymore, with your yelling, and why can’t you two get it together!!!” Before my parents could say anything I ran out the door. I kept on running and running until I couldn't run anymore and sat down on the rock. “AHHH” I got up and let out a good scream and when I looked in the sky birds fluttered away. I stopped in my tracks and held my breath for what I heard next. A faint voice saying: “I’ve been waiting for you” I kept on holding my breath breathing through my tiny nose. When I heard the voice faint in the distance. “Who are you?” I said out loud. Then I heard the faint voice again “At last, Years after years I’ve been searching for the perfect girl and yet I come upon you.” Then the form of the shadow became visible to me . I saw the perfect shape of a man. Wearing all black, black shoes, black coat, black hat, black everything. The closer he got to me, the more I felt his presence standing over me. His finger reached out to me and lifted up my chin and said “What an innocent girl” He held me so tight that my chin began to hurt, but it was like I couldn't talk at all. “ Let m-me go,” I said, And with all the courage I had, I pushed him as hard as I could. When he looked up, he looked at me with such a sinister look, then out of nowhere he smacked my face with his hand. I fell weakly to the Ground “ OW!! that really hurts” I said in my head , but didn’t have enough energy to get up. “Oh '' he said with sarcasm. “Look at me thinking you’re all strong, guess I was wrong” Before I could say anything he just disappeared as faintly and he appeared. I walked home thinking “Who was that guy? What did he want from me?”

Question

So.. I decided to right a story, be honest and tell me what you think.

“What is happening down there?” I thought, as I picked up a sock on my bedroom floor. All morning I had been hearing my mother and father’s voice yelling and arguing at each other. “ You know what, I can’t handle it anymore,” I said.  Then I threw  the rotten apple core  on my  bed and raced down the stairs. “Stop it!” I yelled to my parents. “ I can’t  handle this anymore, with your yelling, and  why can’t you two get it together!!!” Before my parents could say anything I ran out the door. I kept on running and running until I couldn't run anymore and sat down on the rock.  “AHHH” I got up and let out a good scream and when I looked in the sky birds fluttered away. I stopped in my tracks and held my breath for what I heard next.  A faint voice saying: “I’ve been waiting for you”  I kept on holding my breath breathing through my tiny nose. When I heard the voice faint in the distance. “Who are you?” I said out loud. Then I heard the faint voice again  “At last, Years after years I’ve been searching for the perfect girl and yet I come upon you.” Then the form of  the shadow became visible to me . I saw the perfect shape of a man. Wearing all  black, black shoes, black coat, black hat, black everything. The closer he got to me, the more I felt his presence standing over me. His finger reached out to me and lifted up my chin and said “What an innocent girl” He held me so tight that my chin began to hurt, but it was like I couldn't talk at all. “ Let m-me go,” I said, And with   all the courage I had, I pushed him as hard as I could. When he looked up, he looked at me with such a sinister look, then out of nowhere he smacked my face with his hand. I fell weakly to the Ground “ OW!! that really hurts”  I said in my head , but didn’t have enough energy to get up. “Oh '' he said with sarcasm. “Look at me thinking you’re all strong, guess I was wrong” Before I could say anything he just disappeared as faintly and he appeared. I walked home thinking “Who was that guy? What did he want from me?”