Question

I need some suggestions on this poem I wrote so be brutally honest with it...


Wake up every morning to talk to my obsession
But then realize your the cause of my depression
Im tired of this typical stuff
Im tired of my heart being dragged like a cross
Up down left and right
All around til its night
Yes no maybe so
All I know is that this story is coming to an end and so my days become vanity(useless)
So dont bother trying to be my dark knight… you are just wasting your time
If your not wasting your time then flip the dime to still your fate capisce?

Answer 1

ooooooo i likeee

Answer 2

WOW, really good and intense hehehe

Answer 3

IKR

Answer 4

heheheheh im always right

Answer 5

lmao thank you e.e

Answer 6

ofc joeee

Answer 7

OOOOOO I LIKE IT JOE!!!!!!!!!

Answer 8

thanks e,e

Answer 9

You know I always have criticism when it comes to poetry, but this one is very good.

Answer 10

it's actually very good.

Answer 11

I felt this and this is very good Joe!

Answer 12

It's quite nice (:

Answer 13

thanks peeps!

Answer 14

nice poem o: now i might write one B)

Answer 15

🤩😀

Answer 16

Its a pretty good poem actually, a little depressing- but yea it's good!

ngl- I'm laughing where it says "don't bother trying to be my dark knight" 💀

Answer 17

It was lovely.

Answer 18

Thank you e.e

Answer 19

exactly- xDDDDDDDDDD

Answer 20

lol yuh

Answer 21

Nice

Answer 22

im afraid this isn't a poem, it's more on the rap side. either way pretty good!

Answer 23

thats not bad 🤔

Answer 24

lmao thanks and not bad? :(

Answer 25

its really good😁🤍👍

Answer 26

Thanks dude c:

Answer 27

np im a girl

Answer 28

oh mb lol

Answer 29

your good

Answer 30

@shubdeep

Answer 31

Damm thats nice thx bestie