Question

What do you think of this ode so far?

When the sun comes down to hug you, you can go inside for a nice cold drink
You can hear the sound of an ice-cream truck walking down the street
You can hear children laughing while the water plays with you
The sweat drips down your face like a rainstorm that has been asleep
And you try to keep up with sunscreen but you have already been turned into a tomato
When the sun comes down to hug you enjoy it while it lasts.

When the snow comes down to tickle your nose you can go inside for some hot chocolate that runs through your body to warm you up like a fire
You can build a snowman like you or me
Or even a snow angel family
When the snow comes down to tickle your nose you know that winter is near
You wait for Christmas to come and say hi
And hope to catch a glimpse of Saint Nick fly bye
When the snow comes down you know a new year is soon to be here.

When the leaves begin to talk that means Autumn is here
If you listen closely it sounds like music to your ears
When you see the children run about saying trick-or-treat
Its time for Halloween, the day that is a fright.

When the birds begin to sing again you know Spring is near
The plants an animals all awake and some come back to life
The rain awakes once more
While the thunder like clap and roar
The lightning likes to put on a show for all around to see
When Spring is here the world bursts with color like a painting just made.

Answer 1

it's really good

Answer 2

it's good i'll give it 9.99!

Answer 3

actually 99,9%!

Answer 4

thanks!

Answer 5

This is good, I would keep it the way it is tbh. I can't really tell what it's about, so I assume it's something personal maybe? I'm not sure. Anyways good job, it's good. :)

Answer 6

Very good you definitely have a way of words my guy

Answer 7

It looks great!

Answer 8

Niceee

Answer 9

You are very good at using your words. :)

Answer 10

nice