Question

There was a time where there were no humans. No life. No planets. Just one star. One star, called Singularity. Our star exploded, birthing our solar system, and the planet we live on called Earth. The planet we get our most important nutrients from, that is called the Sun. Our most mysterious planet we are exploring is Mars. All of this, thanks to one star. Singularity.
Kiana Baker sat in the back of the class along with the other reticent students. Kiana, if you looked at her and didn’t know her, you would've thought she was shy and didn’t talk to anyone. Well, you’re actually right. She was shier than a kid at the store hiding behind their mother’s leg. Kiana is in 5th grade, and she is 11 years old. She’s very smart for her age and very talented. Though no one actually knows how talented she really is... except for her mom and her best friend Tyrone.
“Come on, K. You gotta sign up for the talent show.” he tells her.
“No, Ty. You know I have glossophobia.”
“Huh? Glosso-what? Kiana, you know, when you talk with those big words, I don’t understand at all.”
“The fear of public speaking.”
“Just say you’re shy because you’re not speaking, though. You’re singing and dancing. Duh.”
She sighs at this. Tyrone puts his arm around her shoulder. “Just look at it this way, if you do this, then, the back seat kids, like us, we won’t have to be so out of the crowd anymore. We won’t have to be the rejects of the students. You’ll be our new beginning. Our big star. Maybe we should call you Singularity.”
“Oh, that’s clever. That’s kinda funny. New beginning. Singularity, the beginning of our solar system. I’m surprised you paid attention to learning that.” she chuckled.
“So, are you still on for the movie night with Tasha and Jacob?” he asked her.
“Yep, but I don’t know about Tasha coming because I heard she got sick.” She lied.
“No, she never got sick. You just don’t want her to come over because you LIKE her, isn’t that right?”
She blushed. “No.” She stormed ahead towards her house.
“K, wait up, dude!” Tyrone called.
“Stop calling me dude! Would you like it if I called you girl?”
“Yes, I would like it a lot.” He replied.
She rolled her eyes. “So, tonight at eight o'clock on the dot, ‘kay?”

Answer 1

My book: "Singularity." Any pointers?

Answer 2

Your book "SIngularity" is wonderful. I feel realistic and I can picture your book in my head. It's very well worded so keep up the work! ^^

Answer 3

Thanks!

Answer 4

Anytime

Answer 5

It looks very good.