Hey guys! My first time posting a song on here and I wanted to know what you think so far.

I had a lot of loves In my life
but I had never felt so loved by you
we talked for a while and introduced
Then of course I had to leave
I promised that I'll be back

came back you were gone
I had never felt so empty
I would never find my love for someone again

Question

Hey guys! My first time posting a song on here and I wanted to know what you think so far.

I had a lot of loves In my life
but I had never felt so loved by you
we talked for a while and introduced
Then of course I had to leave
I promised that I'll be back

came back you were gone
I had never felt so empty
I would never find my love for someone again

foxy44 · Answer

I posted it again

foxy44 · Answer

and edited it a bit

505 · Answer

I'd send this to fex if it was mine

ihateschool69 · Answer

im gonna be critically honest. its a bit choppy and too sappy. maye try this. maybe have something else other than just the love parts to grab peoples attention. then add a small chorus, or something to repeat 2-3 times during the song. hope it does good :)

foxy44 · Answer

@ihateschool69 wrote:

im gonna be critically honest. its a bit choppy and too sappy. maye try this. maybe have something else other than just the love parts to grab peoples attention. then add a small chorus, or something to repeat 2-3 times during the song. hope it does good :)

Alright thanks!

BrokenMoon · Answer

I like it but maybe make it a bit longer???

foxy44 · Answer

@brokenmoon wrote:

I like it but maybe make it a bit longer???

yeah ik, i'm not done

foxy44 · Answer

@foxy44 wrote:

@brokenmoon wrote:

I like it but maybe make it a bit longer???

yeah ik, i'm not done

that's why i said " so far"

domondg · Answer

I agree with ihateschool69, it is a bit choppy, but great start!

foxy44 · Answer

mhmm

jemayacorley234 · Answer

i love it but it is way to long

foxy44 · Answer

@jemayacorley234 wrote:

i love it but it is way to long

for each line?

jemayacorley234 · Answer

yea

foxy44 · Answer

nah

jemayacorley234 · Answer

but i still like it tho

foxy44 · Answer

I have seen longer lines! Thanks!

jemayacorley234 · Answer

you welcome