new poem

Don’t’ lie to me I saw you there
with him, he was sittin by your side,
havin his hand around your shoulders,
don’t lie to me when I say I saw him lean in and kiss you on the lips,
you lied so we’re done, just leave

Question

new poem

Don’t’ lie to me I saw you there
with him, he was sittin by your side,
havin his hand around your shoulders,
don’t lie to me when I say I saw him lean in and kiss you on the lips,
you lied so we’re done, just leave

BrokenMoon · Answer

Nice job yet again, i like the emotion conveyed and at the same time I like how whoever the poem is about was willing to make a clean break instead of begging them to come back

4waldo · Answer

@brokenmoon wrote:

Nice job yet again, i like the emotion conveyed and at the same time I like how whoever the poem is about was willing to make a clean break instead of begging them to come back

thx

AnimeWeeebLMAO · Answer

Masterpiece, yet again. You could probably become a writer one day, and write poems like these. This is really awesome.

4waldo · Answer

@animeweeeblmao wrote:

Masterpiece, yet again. You could probably become a writer one day, and write poems like these. This is really awesome.

thx

hhanan · Answer

It sound really good, also maybe you could put "your lips"instead of 'you on the lips '

4waldo · Answer

@hhanan wrote:

It sound really good, also maybe you could put "your lips"instead of 'you on the lips '

ok thx for the feedback