Can someone proof my essay?

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lolokrat · Answer

The goal of the assignment was to take a scholarly article/journal and translate it so it'd be easier to understand. I chose to make it an Academic Press Release, while still also keeping some elements of MLA Format. I excluded the mla heading from the doc, just for confidentiality. Here's the doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sdRVFt1PaQ5Odf5nEUxDTCewmzUdtMo75WpTY9_5ELk/edit?usp=sharing

lolokrat · Answer

Some specific things I need feedback on:
1) I referenced the author a couple times but I didn't want to continuously mention him or his ideas, since the assignment is mainly to translate it into my own words. Is the way that I did this ok?

Shadow · Answer

Share it with theshadowlegendx@gmail.com

Shadow · Answer

Ping me when it's done.

lolokrat · Answer

oops sorry, thanks for lmk! i shared @shadow

Timmyspu · Answer

In my opinion is it looks really good. Also the other person viewing the paper was me.

Mood · Answer

i cant open it.. sorry!