rate my new poem

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Anna what a sweet name
reminds me of a candy cane
sweet and divine
everytime I see you,
I burst into a million ballons,
as I flutter so high, i try to remind myself you wouldn’t like
a guy like me, thinking of how you would respond, I don’t know why I ponder the thought
I have not shot with a girl that hot, as I look into your eyes,
I fall apart, only if she could see my heart

Question

rate my new poem

I also do requests

Anna what a sweet name
reminds me of a candy cane
sweet and divine 
everytime I see you,
I burst into a million ballons,
as I flutter so high, i try to remind myself you wouldn’t like
a guy like me, thinking of how you would respond, I don’t know why I ponder the thought
I have not shot with a girl that hot, as I look into your eyes,
I fall apart, only if she could see my heart

UhhhKhakis · Answer

Man, out of all of the poems I read from you, this is my favorite. There has been a few mistakes though. One of them is the spelling, as you said "ballons". It is actually spelled balloons*. Another is capitalization. Most of the I's are not capitalized. That's it though. Everything else is alright!

4waldo · Answer

@uhhhkhakis wrote:

Man, out of all of the poems I read from you, this is my favorite. There has been a few mistakes though. One of them is the spelling, as you said "ballons". It is actually spelled balloons*. Another is capitalization. Most of the I's are not capitalized. That's it though. Everything else is alright!

Thank you for your consideration, these mistakes will be fixed

4waldo · Answer

I think all the spelling errors were fixed, notify me if there is still errors

Anna what a sweet name
reminds me of a candy cane
sweet and divine 
everytime I see you,
I burst into a million balloons,
as I flutter so high, I try to remind myself you wouldn’t like
a guy like me, thinking of how you would respond, I don’t know why I ponder the thought
I have not shot with a girl that hot, as I look into your eyes,
I fall apart, only if she could see my heart

Ari1234442 · Answer

That is so nice

UhhhKhakis · Answer

@4waldo wrote:

I think all the spelling errors were fixed, notify me if there is still errors Anna what a sweet name reminds me of a candy cane sweet and divine everytime I see you, I burst into a million balloons, as I flutter so high, I try to remind myself you wouldn’t like a guy like me, thinking of how you would respond, I don’t know why I ponder the thought I have not shot with a girl that hot, as I look into your eyes, I fall apart, only if she could see my heart

Yes! Perfecto!

4waldo · Answer

@uhhhkhakis wrote:

@4waldo wrote:

I think all the spelling errors were fixed, notify me if there is still errors Anna what a sweet name reminds me of a candy cane sweet and divine everytime I see you, I burst into a million balloons, as I flutter so high, I try to remind myself you wouldn’t like a guy like me, thinking of how you would respond, I don’t know why I ponder the thought I have not shot with a girl that hot, as I look into your eyes, I fall apart, only if she could see my heart

Yes! Perfecto!

thx

Mood · Answer

i loveee ittt!

Mood · Answer

can yall help me level up?

Holly · Answer

@4waldo this is great is has a good flow to it. I think u should keep writing and never give up hope

4waldo · Answer

@holly wrote:

@4waldo this is great is has a good flow to it. I think u should keep writing and never give up hope

thank you

Holly · Answer

Ur welcome

hailey1 · Answer

It's sooooooooo good. I almost cried on the last part. Great Job

Ari1234442 · Answer

I told them that