poem review
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The first time I laid my eyes on you
I thought I was going to turn blue
I was only ten years old
you made my heart sped up
I almost gave up, then you walked up
and said, hello, not knowing twenty years later
she would be my wife
_________________________________________________
Frost on the windows, looking outside
wondering where is the sky,
not know it is above,
I ask myself why do I need to thrive
knowing to live, and also die
I look out the window and wonder why
_____________________________________
Feeling the cool breeze hitting my face
what a beautiful way to die
It was summer in 2021 as
I was lying on the grass
I remembered my past
then I saw a glimpse
of the world above
as I lay dying happy
my spirit floated above
________________________________________________
Life can be cruel and ruthless
but always remember this
You can’t turn your back on life
but you can call somebody your friend
someone who loves you within
not many people have this type of friend
someone who will help you through thick and thin,
this type of person is very rare, but
one day they will be everywhere, but until that day comes
we should all be there for someone, no matter the price
because even if it hurts, always remember
you got a friend
______________________________________________________
I want to tell her the way I feel
but every time I can’t speak
as if I were under a spell
I gaze into her eyes
and then she stares at me in surprise
as I look away, I realize
I can’t look at her eye to eye,
feeling ashamed of what I have discovered
all I want to do is go and hug her
_____________________________________________________
Toes in the sand, holdin your hand
Watchin the ocean as a cool breeze blows by
Wondering if I’m still your lover, knowing that you wouldn’t have another
Looking at some kids play ball, knowing that they don’t know how to play at all
starin at you, while you’re starin at me, want to know what we will be,
sittin there hearing the sound of your heartbeat
______________________________________________________
It will get better is what people always say
But life and pain are not the same, pain will change
And the process through time will become the beginning of time
Pain will change and never stay the same, no matter how much
You think you know pain will be pain and never stay the same

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poem review
If there is something you would like me to make a poem about dm me

The first time I laid my eyes on you
I thought I was going to turn blue
I was only ten years old
you made my heart sped up
I almost gave up, then you walked up
and said, hello, not knowing twenty years later
she would be my wife
_________________________________________________
Frost on the windows, looking outside
wondering where is the sky,
not know it is above,
I ask myself why do I need to thrive
knowing to live, and also die
I look out the window and wonder why
_____________________________________
Feeling the cool breeze hitting my face
what a beautiful way to die
It was summer in 2021 as
I was lying on the grass
I remembered my past
then I saw a glimpse
of the world above
as I lay dying happy
my spirit floated above
________________________________________________
Life can be cruel and ruthless
but always remember this
You can’t turn your back on life
but you can call somebody your friend
someone who loves you within
not many people have this type of friend
someone who will help you through thick and thin,
this type of person is very rare, but
one day they will be everywhere, but until that day comes
we should all be there for someone, no matter the price
because even if it hurts, always remember
you got a friend   
______________________________________________________
I want to tell her the way I feel
but every time I can’t speak
as if I were under a spell
I gaze into her eyes
and then she stares at me in surprise
as I look away, I realize
I can’t look at her eye to eye,
feeling ashamed of what I have discovered
all I want to do is go and hug her
_____________________________________________________
Toes in the sand, holdin your hand
Watchin the ocean as a cool breeze blows by
Wondering if I’m still your lover, knowing that you wouldn’t have another
Looking at some kids play ball, knowing that they don’t know how to play at all
starin at you, while you’re starin at me, want to know what we will be,
sittin there hearing the sound of your heartbeat
______________________________________________________
It will get better is what people always say
But life and pain are not the same, pain will change
And the process through time will become the beginning of time
Pain will change and never stay the same, no matter how much
You think you know pain will be pain and never stay the same

ASPEARS · Answer

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Sock · Answer

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Darfangel · Answer

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ITDATBOIQUAVO · Answer

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Niceshotbroski · Answer

nice!

4waldo · Answer

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