Question

I wrote this during summer and I finally got it copied so maybe a little feedback on it would help


Lately my life’s been in red and green
You were all the color I could need
Lately my heart’s been out on my sleeve
You made me feel like I’m somebody

I’m not gonna fight it
Take my excitement and light it
I’m on fire, I’m dying
I could never get tired of trying
So when this all comes together
When we’re in perfect weather
Would you give me your forever?

I hear what they say about you
I’m not sure how to feel, it’s alarming
My heart wants to be around you
Maybe I should really take a warning
I’m not sure if that’s possible to do
It’s easy to fall in love with it picture
Break your heart
Free of charge
But to deal with it on your own
That just makes you feel more alone
You know?

I’m not gonna fight it
Take my excitement and light it
I’m on fire, I’m dying
I could never get tired of trying
So when this all comes together
When we’re in perfect weather
Would you give me your forever?

I don’t guess that’s one way of living
I don’t care about rational decisions
Maybe there are red flags I’m missing
But when I’m dreaming, deja vu visions

Now I’m smiling when I do anything
Honestly, I’m onto better things
New song, for a brand new thing
I write different now, they hate the change

I’m not gonna fight it
Take my excitement and light it
I’m on fire, I’m dying
I could never get tired of trying
So when this all comes together
When we’re in perfect weather
Would you give me your forever?
I think I’ll give you my forever

Answer 1

This is pretty good so far!

Answer 2

nop

Answer 3

aww its nice

Answer 4

This is amazing love

Answer 5

Love it ally 🌹💙

Answer 6

I can see this as a song, or poem, either way it's nice and if it's a song, I'm sure it'd be one a lot of people wanna listen too. It gives off a sad vibe though, still a good song!

Answer 7

Pretty unique and heartwarming