Question

My new Song! I'm Alone

I'm all alone in this house nobody to count on i'm going insane Look I read a article there was a muder but don't assume i live my life as if im drowned One minute you're here and next your undergroundI'm all alone in this house alone No one by my side it worries me All the time i'm going insane im In so much pain sometimes I just wanna look the other way Looking down feel like i'm drowning
There's no one around there I was dropped Down to the ground i'm all in my head
Wondering what I did to be sleeping alone In the bed Sometimes I lay my head at night
Feeling all this pain and I wonder (oh I wonder) what I would do If I still had you
You were by my side all the time Now all you left was my life on the Line All I have left is another dime I wish sometimes this was all a lie I tried so hard to make the pain go away But all you ever see is the hurt on my face You think it's fine you think i'm alright But i'm out of breath trying to end this fight\

Credit to 2 awesome people who helped me @bella2025 @XpertThief

Answer 1

I love it lol

Answer 2

that's goooooood

Answer 3

yw

Answer 4

i like it i think its amazing an i also love that fact that you gave credit to the people who helped you .

Answer 5

It's pretty alright, if I were to critique it, I would suggest adding more metaphors or symbolism or imagery. Set your music apart from the crowd as your lyrics sound too generic and cut copy paste. I bet you can do really well in the future though! Keep going! :D

Answer 6

Sorry if that was too harsh ):

Answer 7

it fine thx though

Answer 8

Mhm

Answer 9

ish bootiful good jobbbb<333333

Answer 10

Amazing :)

Answer 11

Niceeeeeeeeee