Question

tell me what you think on my writing assignment!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EijdyuIIbd2EbjzAt2X8j6TPAV218Atld_PlTtnk_KQ/edit?usp=sharing

Answer 1

In my opinion it's pretty great I don't know about anyone else's opinion. But I think it's good from what I could have read from the tiny screen I had.

Answer 2

haha thanks!

Answer 3

very nice

Answer 4

Good work on it, keep it up!

Answer 5

Yo this is amazing!

Answer 6

thanks youuuu!!

Answer 7

So far it looks good. The only thing I would comment on for improvement is that it looks like you're missing the occasional period and have capitalized some words that shouldn't have been capitalized. Overall, minor errors that can be easily fixed. Story was entertaining so far.

Answer 8

There are some minor mistakes here and there, mostly just capitalization/punctuation mistakes. I think it's pretty good! /gen

Answer 9

thanks for the feedback! ill go in and fix them lolzs

Answer 10

Nice job 👍🏻

Answer 11

@monicasayshi1234567

Great story, I enjoyed the read. I provided a few suggestions on the Google Doc that you may find helpful. I'm an English major with a love for creative writing and reading so I am somewhat practiced in editorial work.

Half of what I did was reformatting the structure of the story, in terms of indentation and combining or separating sections (where distinct ideas need to stand alone or others work better together as one paragraph). Other than that, imagery, verbal, or detail suggestions. Very few grammatical errors, although it's worth noting what I said about commas and dialogue tags.

Notably, you may also want to consider less characters and names at the outset. In the first few pages, there's already over five characters and it's hard to let anyone's personality develop or for a character to be envisioned in the readers mind if there is a lot of traffic.

If you need any more help or would like me to look over a story, feel free to ping me here or on Discord (you can find a link to the server on my profile, as I'm not on QC a lot). Cheers, and definitely keep writing. It's the best way to keep getting better at it and you definitely have stories to tell.

Answer 12

id say it's pretty good

Answer 13

noice

Answer 14

I don't like it i love it

Answer 15

i thought this was really good. it sounds professional. honestly, you should make more.