Hello English lovers.
I'm writing the start of my novel and i would like some help and editing/critique from anyone! leave your suggestion edits and possibly future plots ideas in this document!
tysm!!!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ma374Q1ewPNx-WSW0S2tiJ1aXNJC85UyqYcUt9j7Gko/edit?usp=sharing

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Hello English lovers. 
I'm writing the start of my novel and i would like some help and editing/critique from anyone! leave your suggestion edits and possibly future plots ideas in this document!
tysm!!!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ma374Q1ewPNx-WSW0S2tiJ1aXNJC85UyqYcUt9j7Gko/edit?usp=sharing

Eli9lizzyyy · Answer

it should be about dragons and space ships

Monicaiswriting246 · Answer

damn i wish

liatartt · Answer

Maybe add some more context in the beginning because I'm confused at where this is going. Who is Jasper? I though it was a girl in the beginning? If it's a different person, maybe a different chapter? Also remember to indent, and there are some minor errors, but overall it's fine!

YRJ8498 · Answer

it should be about ninja