hey i just cam back to qc and ive been recently trying to write a short story or normal book.. its not finished and i haven't wrote in a while obviously this is the rough draft but id love tips and judgement on what i have so far (in comments )

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men · Answer

This book is about LGBTQ and its on a trans man who isn't accepted in his society and has a toxic lover that he's been dating for years and when he comes out finally after discovering himself he gets killed before he can tell his story and live his life so his "ghost" comes back to tell his story (not a ghost story he's just telling his story)

men · Answer

Ive only got a bit done bc i lost motivation and thought it was bad but here

men · Answer

Julia(n) : In the end it wasn't my name on the gravestone it was hers. I died not knowing who I was. though I should have known I was destined for failure from birth. I died with a gravestone that wasn't even mine.
I'm Julian- Huxley. I'm a trans man and This is my story.

We met about 3 years ago and it just clicked. The day our eyes locked I knew he was special. 
His name was Noah. He was a few years older than me. Our relationship was always 
a bit toxic and manipulative but I always brushed it off because he had a rough past. We met in 2009. We shared the same classes and the teacher assigned seats beside him. And started chatting. Though we started off as just friends we grew closer and closer over time.

men · Answer

its really small bc i lost motivation but i really wanna make something like this

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but its not done

MrsHero · Answer

I love it

MrsHero · Answer

U did good

MrsHero · Answer

100/10

men · Answer

@mrshero wrote:

I love it

thank you : }

MrsHero · Answer

@men wrote:

@mrshero wrote:

I love it

thank you : }

Ywww

CheeseStick7793 · Answer

It's cool
I write books as well.

men · Answer

@cheesestick7793 wrote:

It's cool I write books as well.

thats cool ! and thank you!

CheeseStick7793 · Answer

but actuall books

men · Answer

@cheesestick7793 wrote:

but actuall books

oh cool

CheeseStick7793 · Answer

I don't know how to do the leather part of the book

CheeseStick7793 · Answer

like attach paper

CheeseStick7793 · Answer

confusing

Cyber · Answer

I love this 💖🏳️‍🌈

men · Answer

@cyber wrote:

I love this 💖🏳️‍🌈

thanks amy means alot !!

UnknownUser69 · Answer

have u seen that thingie

men · Answer

@unknownuser69 wrote:

have u seen that thingie

what thingie ??

UnknownUser69 · Answer

the big thingie

men · Answer

@unknownuser69 wrote:

the big thingie

im confused

UnknownUser69 · Answer

the big one

UnknownUser69 · Answer

@tetsxpreme wrote:

hehehe I like toes

Monicaiswriting246 · Answer

noice

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

super good, i think you're off to a good start. especially with highlighting a problem with becoming trans, which is still being seen as the gender you were before. I think that's very powerful and I hope you have good luck with continuing the rest of your story :)

summermorgan · Answer

so far i think its good. really interesting and i could read more.