Question

So, I wrote this to get my feelings out a couple weeks ago, tell me what you think of it honestly.
What I see on my Screen:
By: Rayne

What I see on my screen,
Is pretty girls,
With pretty things,
Like cute clothes,
And long pretty hair,
And perfect nails,
Do they even care?
What I see on my screen,
Are people who are happy,
And not like me
I want to be,
Like what is on my screen,
But I don’t have the qualities,
I am not the perfect teen.
I could grow my hair,
And change my clothes,
And do more makeup,
And pierce my nose.
Should I be what is on my screen,
Or should I wait patiently,
And let me,
Be me.

Answer 1

I really like this. It really talks about reality.

Answer 2

good job

Answer 3

its amazing it rlly shows how i feel

Answer 4

Thank u both so much :)

Answer 5

It shows a lot of detail and shows the feelings of a lot of individuals, Good Job on capturing that effect!

Answer 6

Very good job! It's a very healthy exercise to let out your feelings by writing.

Answer 7

i like this a lot. it shows a lot of emotions and its relatable to many other teens.

Answer 8

good job