Question

A short story i added more things to

Answer 1

As I stepped off the train I couldn't help but feel elated after all I was seeing you, I headed into the station, and I looked around through the pouring rain eagerly looking for you and I suddenly saw you. Beautiful you waiting there for me, I excitedly run over to you watching as you start smiling as i run into your arms mine wrapping around your back I look at you and I take it in your smell, your smile, your soaked hair every beautiful curl on her head,The rain drops falling from your nose, your beautiful beautiful green eyes and every little freckle on your face and i try counting them all before I suddenly feel you jolt forward with a look of shock and sadness on your face, a little gasp of pain escapes from your lips, and as I back away letting you fall, I see a knife buried directly in middle of your chest piercing through your heart a quick death but not instant I don't jump or scream or sob because I was the one that put it there. I sat down and took one last look at you whispering, “I’m sorry it had to be this way i loved you i truly did” with tears in my eyes I watch as you slowly shut your eyes, your last breath escaping from your lips The rain attempting to wash away the pool of blood you now lie in. After a moment I brushed a lock of hair out of your face,and I gave you one final kiss. I wiped my tears away,and as I was walking away I noticed something shiny on your neck and I realized it was a necklace, No not any old necklace it was the necklace. I bent down and took the necklace off of your neck, I turned it over in my hand feeling the indents of the engraving. The engraving said “I'll love you forever.” It was the engagement gift I got for you for our first anniversary. I realize today is our 10 year anniversary before standing up, pocketing the necklace and walking out of the train station with tears in my eyes and thinking, I'm doing this for us. I promise you wouldn't have wanted to see what our world has turned into. It's for the better. With a sad pit of regret settling in my stomach I walk out of the station repeating to myself it’s for the better. I did this for us.

Answer 2

Oml this is so descriptive. You only have a few grammar and punctuation problems but otherwise so good! I enjoyed reading this!

Answer 3

dang this is long must've took time

Answer 4

That's good :D

Answer 5

its horrible

Answer 6

why did u say short story?

Answer 7

my normal writing is like 1,000+ words

Answer 8

thats pretty long