Question

Heres an actually long story im in the process of writing its 1,222 words and my charecter just died
also ignore my other post it was the wrogn version of it

Answer 1

The lost and forgotten Ghost



Once upon a time, there was

a child who loved to do many things like drawing and writing, but the thing he

loved most of all was exploring the woods behind his home but one day his

exploring would lead to a quite literally deadly discovery. On that fateful

day, the child was wandering through the woods and stumbled upon a clearing

that he knew was not there before. He noticed that in the middle of the

clearing stood a small house the perfect size for a child like him, as he

approached the house an extremely tall man exited the house realizing it was

impossible for him to have been inhabiting the house, Pumpkin took a hesitant

step back craning his neck to see the man. The child noticed that the tall man

was wearing an extremely tall top hat with a bushel of red feathers on the side

around, a black silky suit that had a long tailcoat and a blood red tie tucked

into his suit. The tall man looked down at the child with a hint of curiosity

or maybe sadness and said, “What are you doing in these parts kid? It's not

safe for you here.” The tall man's voice was deep, the kind of deep that sent a

cold shiver down your spine. the child stuttered, "I-I was exploring the

woods behind my house, what are you doing here? I've never seen this clearing

before, and I explore these woods a lot.” the tall man said, “well I don’t

normally live in this area but I was needed and so I am here now. What’s your

name kid?” “My name is Pumpkin! What’s yours?” pumpkin said excited to

make a new friend. The tall man smiled and said “I have been called many things

by many people. My name is Charos, but you can call me whatever you wish.” “Oh

ok! Ch are so I’ll try to remember that” The tall man chuckled and said, “you

should come inside, it's getting rather chilly outside.” as soon as Charos said

that Pumpkin suddenly felt the cold biting at his nose and hands and hesitantly

entered the cabin. Pumpkin saw that the house was as tiny as the outside

portrayed it to be with a small kitchen and a large fire surrounded by a few

chairs and a couch. When Pumpkin turned around, he saw that Moss’s height had

changed. Moss was still wearing the same outfit but had become smaller. Moss

was still extremely tall but was a normal tall like his dad. “how’d you do

that?” Asked Pumpkin “The shrinking? It is just a little trick I learned a long

time ago. Here, sit down at the table.” Pumpkin took off his jacket, and gloves

and put them on a little coat rack and walked over to the small table and sat

down. Charos asked, “would you like some tea?” “S-sure, I would love some tea

if it’s not too much of a bother.” Pumpkin said as he rubbed his hands

together trying to warm himself up, he watched Moss put an iron tea kettle on

the fire. “What kind of tea would you like?” Moss asked. “Well, mint tea but

whatever you have is fine.” Charos started looking through the cabinets and

After a moment said, “you are in luck, I have one more mint tea bag left!”

Charos rummaged through the

cabinets grabbing two mugs and setting them on the table. Pumpkin watched as

Charos filled up the tea kettle and put it on a little hook just above the fire

and threw a few logs into the fire. After a few minutes, the tea kettle began

to whistle, and Charos walked over and pulled it off the fire, walked over to

the table and poured the hot water into two cups sitting on the table. Charos

handed Pumpkin his tea and said, “there you go.” Pumpkin picked up his and took

a big sip of his tea and yelled “HOT TEA HOT TEA!! “As he was fanning his

Tongue trying to cool it down the Tall man started laughing and after a moment

said, “I have a gift for you Pumpkin.” Charos handed Pumpkin a tiny frog. “I

love him!!” Pumpkin squealed but why is he missing an eye? “He fought a battle

against the toads long ago, his name is Fred he will be your spirit guide for the

afterlife.” Moss said. ““SPIRIT GUIDE?!? AFTER LIFE?!?! What are you talking

about!?!?” Pumpkin yelled rushing up from the table knocking everything off the

table. Moss sighed and mumbled, “this always happens every time” as he picked

everything up off the floor he said, “my name charos means death I am the grim

Reaper and I'm so sorry, but your time is up.” After Moss said that Pumpkin

started to feel drowsy. Moss picked him up and laid him on the couch. “w-why

h-how could you? "Pumpkin whispered barely able to keep his eyes open or

his head up. Moss looked at pumpkin with a truly heartbroken look and

said, “I’m sorry I have no choice, it's the law. I despise it when they make me

take children. I really do. I'm sorry I'm so so sorry.” Moss put Fred next to

Pumpkin and said, “Fred will show you where to go, they'll lead you to the

underworld. I'll see you soon.” Pumpkin's eyes slowly fluttered shut as Moss

said, “goodbye”, their voice faltering for just a moment.



Pumpkin Suddenly woke up in the middle of a beautiful flower field and as he was sitting up, he said well the obvious thing anyone would say,“Where am I?” he got up and as he was brushing himself off, he looked around in awe taking in the surroundings and the beautiful colors of the flowers surrounding him then out of the corner of his eye noticed something jumping up and down looking over to it pumpkin saw that it was a little frog and upon closer inspection he noticed that the little frog only had one eye. Pumpkin stood back up and said, “How peculiar a one eyed frog” pumpkin felt a tug of recognition like a distant memory trying to claw its way back to the surface, but before pumpkin could think of why he felt that the little frog started jumping away through the brush. Pumpkin rushed to follow the little frog running through the brush dodging the brush and low hanging branches. Pumpkin followed the frog all the way into the road and made it to the middle of the road before he heard it, a loud horn coming from a semi truck he wa s terrified but he couldn't move he was paralyzed with fear watching as the semi truck got close and closer and in an act of last minute panic pumpkin put his hands up using his hands to try to block the semi truck. Pumpkin shut his eyes tightly waiting for the impact. Pumpkin felt a cold draft go up his back but the semi truck never hit him. After a moment he opened his eyes and saw that he was perfectly ok. Terrified pumpkin started running out of the road only to be stopped by someone grabbing his hand. Pumpkin looked to see

Answer 2

also yes there are grammar spelling and just overall alot of mistakes i know

Answer 3

why is it so weirdly spaced in the middle

Answer 4

Tomorrow I could run through the whole thing and help you fix and/or correct some of your mistakes because I can't do it that easy on my phone. Xd Also this is very good. Well done.

Answer 5

i could try and read it all tonight but from what i saw i like it-it's probably better than my story

Answer 6

I LOVE IT, ITS AMAZING, btw I read it all and it a really good writer

Answer 7

Ur*

Answer 8

i thought it was a trash story just like any other until he exposed himself to be the grim reaper. Your writing is great u should keep going and lmk if in future u want me to read any of ur stories

Answer 9

oop okay she he really did die,m

Answer 10

?

Answer 11

huh

Answer 12

pumpkin is dead
fred is his spirit guide

Answer 13

ohhh okay

Answer 14

i thought he didn't die and was imagining or sum

Answer 15

a little one eyed froggie inspired by a frog i had sewn a little whiel ago

Answer 16

sad :(

Answer 17

pumpkin was cute

Answer 18

rip pumpkin

Answer 19

yeah but hes gonan eventually meet the grimm repaer again and maybe aomething will happen

Answer 20

i havent decided yet

Answer 21

exploring would lead to a quite literally deadly discovery. On that fateful
i think u could remove that literally from there. sounds awkward idk

Answer 22

i posted the update to my story

Answer 23

@landongoma