Question

Finished "essay" paragraph.
@YJR8498 @Timmyspu

Answer 1

Turns out I was not supposed to write a whole essay, just small parts of it so here it is just wondering if it's good or not.

1st sentence- Argument
2nd sentence- Evidence (cite website)
3rd-5th sentence- Explain Evidence
6th sentence- Counter Argument
7th sentence- Additional evidence, explanation of the evidence, closing sentence.



Here is it;

Video games make people more likely to be violent in real life. According to the American Psychologist Association “One study reveals that young men who are habitually aggressive may be especially vulnerable to the aggression-enhancing effects of repeated exposure to violent games," said psychologists Craig A. Anderson, Ph.D., and Karen E. Dill, Ph.D. "The other study reveals that even a brief exposure to violent video games can temporarily increase aggressive behavior in all types of participants." This shows that when you play video games most of the time people get aggressive with attitude and rage when they lose or die in their game. People rage because once you die or lose when you did something and you tried or tried your absolute best, you didn’t accomplish the win or the objective you rage, get mad, have an attitude, and all because you lost in a video game. Some people think that video games relax you because it’s “Just a game” as they say. But they're wrong, once you try and try and try and you can’t do it, or if you keep losing, or dying you are the complete opposite from relaxed. You’re angered, upset, and annoyed because you lost what you were trying to achieve. Another reason is, “Playing violent video games like Doom, Wolfenstein 3D or Mortal Kombat can increase a person's aggressive thoughts, feelings and behavior both in laboratory settings and in actual life, according to two studies appearing in the April issue of the American Psychological Association's (APA)” Journal of Personality and Social Psychology. Furthermore, violent video games may be more harmful than violent television and movies because they are interactive, very engrossing, and require the player to identify with the aggressor, say the researchers according to the American Psychologist Association. This shows that video games do make you mad and it makes people, in general, more people with attitude and changes feelings of certain things. Henceforth, people will get mad, people can change from the slightest things and people getting raged from video games will continue.

Answer 2

I like it

Answer 3

its nice

Answer 4

So theres nothing to fix, or did you just read the 1st sentence?

Answer 5

Okie okie

Let's pull it apart.

Your claim:
`Video games make people more likely to be violent in real life.`

The counterclaim:
`video games relax you.`

As per explaining the detail, it's not only pointing out the lose of the game.

When it comes to violent games, it introduces people to violence and different methods on how to kill and what kills faster. This gifts the players a hunger of curiosity and they'd eventually want to test it out in real life rather than just in a game.

Answer 6

Some may disagree stating how violent games are a hobby and pulls their minds away from real life stress. It may help temporarily depending if the player wins or loses, but at the same time it grants new ideas and may lead to something far worse.

Answer 7

Ah, Thank you!

Answer 8

Ofc~ <3