im starting to write this song think im gonna like call it home or something the secound paragraph is the corus what do you think?

Up, down, all around, not knowing a place to call home
Late at night, chasing stars, went to far, had to find a place to crash on mars
No longer know, where i should go, it's getting cold, not having an place to call home

You light up the night when i saw you, hooked just from the smell of your perfume, galaxies can't shine as bright as you do, i knew from the moment i met you

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im starting to write this song think im gonna like call it home or something the secound paragraph is the corus what do you think?

Up, down, all around, not knowing a place to call home
Late at night, chasing stars, went to far, had to find a place to crash on mars
No longer know, where i should go, it's getting cold, not having an place to call home

You light up the night when i saw you, hooked just from the smell of your perfume, galaxies can't shine as bright as you do, i knew from the moment i met you

JadynB · Answer

ive sold a few songs to some artists, but when im not looking to sell or im just trying to find inspiration to write about such as rn, i stll love to hear feed back!

JadynB · Answer

what do yall think?

Ava1 · Answer

I like it! Good job!

JadynB · Answer

aww thank you, i was begining to think everyone was to scared to reply lmao

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

it's really good! It sounds like a good song, you sound very skilled in the music industry already c:

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

This. Is. Awesome. definitely a song i would want to listen to a lot if i heard it on the radio or something :D

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

im sure it would sound good if you were to make it into a song B)