Question

Guys, will you look at my essay and lmk if there's anything I need to fix?

Answer 1

When you were little, were you ever asked what you wanted to be when you grew up? Well, I was asked that question frequently. I have been thinking about the answer for a while. Over the years my dream job has drastically changed. I am sure it will still change but right now, I am really hoping to go to Harvard to study to become a lawyer.

There are many reasons why I dream of being a lawyer. One of the reasons is because I know becoming a lawyer is a challenge. I am willing to accept that challenge and try to overcome it. I know there will be difficult times, times where I will want to give up on becoming a lawyer. I am hoping that if I overcome this challenge it will show that I can do anything if I believe in myself.

Another reason why I want to become a lawyer is that it makes good money. I know that when I say that I sound selfish but I do not mean it to sound that way. Growing up, I did not have much money to get whatever I wanted. My parents work very hard just to get food for us. My dad is a mechanic so that my mom is able to be a stay at home mom. If I were to make good money, I would be able to help them out financially. It will be my way of showing them I appreciate what they have done for me.

One last reason why I dream of becoming a lawyer is it will help me grow as a person. I have a fear of talking in front of large groups of people. I am hoping that if I realized becoming a lawyer would help people it will help me to overcome my fear of public speaking. I love helping people, and I hate that my fear holds me back from doing that so I am looking forward to overcoming that fear.

As Walt Disney once said, “All your dreams can come true if you have the courage to pursue them.” I hope when I grow up that I can have the courage to become a lawyer. I know it is hard work to become a lawyer, and that I will have to do many years of school. But, I love school and I am ready to work incredibly hard to pursue this dream that I have. These are just a few reasons why I dream of becoming a lawyer.

Answer 2

This sounds great tbh I wouldn't change anything at all

Answer 3

This is indeed amazing ;0

Answer 4

Keep up the good work

Answer 5

I love how you put your feelings first and realized the big steps your taking to over come your fears and help people. I see you spelled everything correctly, and no words missed. I love that you want to be a Lawyer, one day I hope to be a detective. I hope your dream comes true. Once again indeed good job!

Answer 6

It is really good, it is nothing I could write because of how good it is. Good job

Answer 7

I will take a look at it.

Answer 8

I underlined some spelling errors, grammar errors, and passive verbs that need to be fixed. Remember to proofread your work before submitting essay answers.

Here is a file I made for the underlined words

Answer 9

If you already submitted your essay, this is just something you can look at when writing your next essay. :)