hey guys i wrote this song and i’d like to hear some feedback i sampled a few lyrics

Why don’t we all take a hard look at the world we live in.
Why is it that we have all the hate not love,
Why is there all ways room for war, not peace?
Why is it that no one ever thinks about the consequences of their actions?
Is this what it has come to?

Why don’t we all take time to think about each other?
We are surrounded by so much beauty but no one takes the time to appreciate it.
We are all so busy with our lives, too busy to even notice
as life passes by,
Days become weeks, weeks become months and months become years.
yet there is no difference in the world.

Why is our world filled with corruption, destruction, poverty and many other endless things.
It makes me wonder, have we all given up?
Haven’t we learnt a lesson yet?

The world that we live in, is it too late to change it?
Or are we so far gone, that change has just become a mirage.
let us all have some hope and pray for peace
and may god bless our soul,
Because the world we live in isn’t going to last much longer.
young tringo tringo…out…

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hey guys i wrote this song and i’d like to hear some feedback i sampled a few lyrics

Why don’t we all take a hard look at the world we live in.
Why is it that we have all the hate not love,
Why is there all ways room for war, not peace?
Why is it that no one ever thinks about the consequences of their actions?
Is this what it has come to?

Why don’t we all take time to think about each other?
We are surrounded by so much beauty but no one takes the time to appreciate it.
We are all so busy with our lives, too busy to even notice
as life passes by,
Days become weeks, weeks become months and months become years.
yet there is no difference in the world.

Why is our world filled with corruption, destruction, poverty and many other endless things.
It makes me wonder, have we all given up?
Haven’t we learnt a lesson yet?

The world that we live in, is it too late to change it?
Or are we so far gone, that change has just become a mirage.
let us all have some hope and pray for peace
and may god bless our soul,
Because the world we live in isn’t going to last much longer.
young tringo tringo…out…

martai · Answer

GOOD

xxDeppressionxx · Answer

Looks like you created a master piece

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yungtringotringo · Answer

@martai wrote:

GOOD

thank you thank you this is my work

yungtringotringo · Answer

@xxdeppressionxx wrote:

Looks like you created a master piece ╭━╮╱╭╮╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╭╮╱╭╮ ┃┃╰╮┃┃╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╭╮╱╱┃┃╱┃┃ ┃╭╮╰╯┣┳━━┳━━╮╱╰╋━━┫╰━┫┃ ┃┃╰╮┃┣┫╭━┫┃━┫╱╭┫╭╮┃╭╮┣╯ ┃┃╱┃┃┃┃╰━┫┃━┫╱┃┃╰╯┃╰╯┣╮ ╰╯╱╰━┻┻━━┻━━╯╱┃┣━━┻━━┻╯ ╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╭╯┃ ╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╱╰━╯

:’) thank you father

xxDeppressionxx · Answer

Np

yungtringotringo · Answer

also i would like to give a shout out to black people blm

xxDeppressionxx · Answer

Actually 
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╰╯╱╰┻━┻━┻╯ lives matter

yungtringotringo · Answer

yea but black lives ain’t free
i’d also like to give a shout out to Soups

yungtringotringo · Answer

nvm then

BrokenMoon · Answer

Very neat. what genre were you planning on making it?

xxDeppressionxx · Answer

Unless you keep it on track then you need to close it

maths89898 · Answer

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Ferrari · Answer

I like it. 9.5/10. Very inspirational. Also, meeting person, or wtv, shut up please.