I am making an application video, but I need feedback, think you can help?
https://www.canva.com/design/DAE7X7n_W38/sefW-xHdKFB6bghZQTBTpA/watch?utm_content=DAE7X7n_W38&utm_campaign=designshare&utm_medium=link&utm_source=publishsharelink

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I am making an application video, but I need feedback, think you can help? 
https://www.canva.com/design/DAE7X7n_W38/sefW-xHdKFB6bghZQTBTpA/watch?utm_content=DAE7X7n_W38&utm_campaign=designshare&utm_medium=link&utm_source=publishsharelink

Chinky · Answer

It is amazing. Good job

montes67 · Answer

@chinky wrote:

It is amazing. Good job

thanks!

Chinky · Answer

The video was so cool. I really liked it.

XxIceBearsWifexX · Answer

It's pretty good besides on the page "What is ur BEST leadership experience" there is a sentence that has a little grammar mistake. It says "Luckily, they it worked and we got a few more players. " Its one of the last sentences but to fix it you just have to remove either they or it but keep the other one. Otherwise its good, sorry if you already submitted it and I'm a bit late. But good luck!

XxIceBearsWifexX · Answer

To be clear it one of the last sentences on that page, wanna make it clear and easy to find for you. :)

montes67 · Answer

@xxicebearswifexx wrote:

To be clear it one of the last sentences on that page, wanna make it clear and easy to find for you. :)

lol thanks i will correct it!

XxIceBearsWifexX · Answer

Your welcome, n ok, I wish you gud luck on getting that spot.

montes67 · Answer

i had no idea i typed it like that thanks for catching it!

XxIceBearsWifexX · Answer

Its fine I've done that before bc i write books sometimes n I reread it or have other ppl read it to see if I missed anything. Otherwise its really gud