I wrote a poem about drugs and body(not sure if its allowed but....)

You are perfect how you are
Your a all star
But don't chew on a cigar
80 percent of 10 years olders have eating disorder
So keep your health in order
Not like those new yorkers
Who don't and eat nonstop
So you better not stop
Being yourself
And tell
Yourself that your perfect how you are
If a barbie was a real woman
She would have to walk on all fours just like a truman
Your body is a beauty
So do your duty
And don't be moody
About your body
Because you're a ferrari.

Question

I wrote a poem about drugs and body(not sure if its allowed but....)

You are perfect how you are
Your a all star 
But don't chew on a cigar 
80 percent of 10 years olders have eating disorder
So keep your health in order
Not like those new yorkers
Who don't and eat nonstop
So you better not stop 
Being yourself
And tell
Yourself that your perfect how you are 
If a barbie was a real woman
She would have to walk on all fours just like a truman 
Your body is a beauty 
So do your duty 
And don't be moody 
About your body 
Because you're a ferrari.

Lura · Answer

Mind if I give some constructive criticism? ^^

Jake15 · Answer

@lura wrote:

Mind if I give some constructive criticism? ^^

lol sure

Jake15 · Answer

Hope you like it

Lura · Answer

So for some lines,I noticed that some of them didnt really make sense to me??

Like the ferrari line nd the barbie one,including the truman

Lura · Answer

Overall a good poem,if you want help,you can DM me or JayDaBun,he was a poem club president ^^

Jake15 · Answer

ok

selenass · Answer

you ate this sh.it up

maths89898 · Answer

This is really good keep it up man!