this poem is called forever pain(i think its bad) but i want other peoples feedback on it...... I got Shot in the heart with a dart that makes my heart break apart my blood slowly leaks away through a ruptured blood vessel but yes i'm okay i just wanna say Orange god for this horrible day, Orange god for this endless pain i now have no choice but to hide my feelings, to hide them with a smile everyday but i hate how nobody notices my pain i hate how no one stops and asks if i'm okay it hurts it wont go away will it ever fade or is it forever pain maybe when i die the pain will finally fade the pain will be gone and i will breathe no longer.

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this poem is called forever pain(i think its bad) but i want other peoples feedback on it...... I got Shot in the heart with a dart that makes my heart break apart my blood slowly leaks away through a ruptured blood vessel but yes i'm okay i just wanna say Orange god for this horrible day, Orange god for this endless pain i now have no choice but to hide my feelings, to hide them with a smile everyday but i hate how nobody notices my pain i hate how no one stops and asks if i'm okay it hurts it wont go away  will it ever fade or is it forever pain maybe when i die the pain will finally fade the pain will be gone and i will breathe no longer.

ctompk3743 · Answer

This Is the most saddest and awesome poem I ever seen I give It 10,000/10,000 greatest poem ever

oopdontknowher · Answer

omg this is really good i like it a lot

Victorya · Answer

@oopdontknowher  thank you so much

oopdontknowher · Answer

@victorya wrote:

@oopdontknowher thank you so much

anytime <3

Victorya · Answer

@ctompk3743 thank you, you're so nice

DepressedDemon · Answer

Wow this is amazing i hope you have great success in the future...POP OFF QUEEN..dont drop your crown👑EVER..you are so amazing

keriya · Answer

y u wright it as a paragraph

Victorya · Answer

idk..sorry

NotYourGurlKayla · Answer

Ngl but this is a very good poem, I love the way that you expressed some feelings into it and took time to make it sound right. Good job! infinity/10

Victorya · Answer

@notyourgurlkayla wrote:

Ngl but this is a very good poem, I love the way that you expressed some feelings into it and took time to make it sound right. Good job! infinity/10

thanks a lot

NotYourGurlKayla · Answer

@victorya wrote:

@notyourgurlkayla wrote:

Ngl but this is a very good poem, I love the way that you expressed some feelings into it and took time to make it sound right. Good job! infinity/10

thanks a lot

Ur welcome!<33

ctompk3743 · Answer

Thanks for the nice comment

Victorya · Answer

@ctompk3743 wrote:

Thanks for the nice comment

ofc

ctompk3743 · Answer

lol

Cheythepie56 · Answer

omg this is really good i like it alot i wish i was that good lmao

cutebunny123 · Answer

Please don't say it's bad. I love it, you did so well. Awesome job, keep up the great work. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

1008426 · Answer

That's really good 10/10

Ava1 · Answer

10/10

ur1dad7 · Answer

honestly it really great

Victorya · Answer

@ur1dad7 wrote:

honestly it really great

thx

UrHawtieIsNotHere4u · Answer

Soo gud.

Victorya · Answer

@urhawtieisnothere4u wrote:

Soo gud.

thx<3